Weazie Oekaki Intermediate

Weazie Oekaki Intermediate
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foofoo1515 @ Monday, March 9th 2009, 7:15 PM

the next tryout (if i get that far) will have a much better background

so here is my first tryout

Anne Dyari @ Monday, March 9th 2009, 8:55 PM

I love how his face and tail are really stylized. Especcially love his eyes. One thing though, it almost looks like his muzzle is crooked, but that might be just the expression ^^;

I like the use of texture in the bg too, but next time if you could maybe make your character more a part of your background?

Otherwise, this is great, your lines are so pretty XP

lenny @ Monday, March 9th 2009, 9:28 PM

this is freakin beautiful D:

im lovin the tail :X

Toasteh @ Monday, March 9th 2009, 9:42 PM

Yeah, Anne's right the muzzle's a little crooked. I can redline the face for you, gimme a sec. C:

I REALLY LIKE THIS THOUGH
I would've preferred maybe making the shading more "furry" on the tail, but I don't think you should have many problems getting in. C:

One more thing though--please try to watch the coloring. There are a whole bunch of white spots OH NO. D:
Okay that's it. |D

Edit: Face redline C:
http://i40.tinypic.com/k04p7a.png
Hope it helps, but the eyes were a little large and the head just a wee bit too small. Of course...about the eyes...style I'm guessing?

Anyway, goodluck! <3

(Edited on March 9, 2009, 9:51 pm)

Detective Wolf @ Tuesday, March 10th 2009, 11:24 PM

dawwwwwwwwww it's so adorable and cute
the anatomy on the body is so cool lookin' and the shading is amazing
already stated, the head/snout don't really line up
like the eyes and head are facing one way, while the snout is facing the other
I don't really agree with the redline given,
so I'd recommend looking at irl pictures of dogs like here
http://www.cbv.ns.ca/bec/riley1.jpg

(Edited by Toasteh)
YEAH my redlines are usually pretty inacurate. |D;
It's why I don't like doing them very often sldkf
Oh yeah, I did it based on the eyes' postions. D:

foofoo1515 @ Wednesday, March 11th 2009, 6:03 PM

thanks you guys for all your tips

oh and for the slanted mouth, my style you'll sometimes see it like that to give it a goofy affect but i sometimes put the wrong position so i'll fix that too ^________^ thank you all <3 i will start tryout 2 soon

Toasteh @ Wednesday, March 11th 2009, 10:06 PM

OH alright then just ignore my redline then. |D;
http://i40.tinypic.com/2rnaqeo.png
This blackline is probably a little more accurate for the look you were going for, not perfect, just the gist of it. :I

lenny @ Thursday, March 12th 2009, 4:52 AM

:X....i really like it....maybe hes a crooked faced dog ?
:X....my friends dog has kink in his tail...maybe it could be something like that?

-ramble-

i still really like it...did you even use the beizer tool?

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Anne Dyari @ Sunday, March 8th 2009, 3:07 AM

we needs to be more active here!

lenny @ Sunday, March 8th 2009, 8:18 AM

i was saying that in my head :x
or i was asking that question :x

Toasteh @ Sunday, March 8th 2009, 8:49 PM

INDEED q q
I should draw something, brb

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Daisoku @ Saturday, February 28th 2009, 9:03 AM

My 2nd tryout here..

It's been a while since my first..

1st: http://oekaki.weazie.com/intermediate/pictures/138.png

This is also the theme, Draw human charas as animals.. Miyaro and Nervana!

Soo~
CRITS & COMMENTS PLZU?

(Edited on February 28, 2009, 9:11 am)

Toasteh @ Saturday, February 28th 2009, 3:15 PM

I'm going to have to say out, sorry hon. :C

MUCH MUCH MUCH needed improvement from your last tryouts, but I don't think we're quite up to par yet.

I don't really have time to crit, I'll leave that to the others. :C

Edit: Gimme a sec, I'll redline for you

(Edited on February 28, 2009, 7:49 pm)

Edit: I redlined as best I could
http://i40.tinypic.com/w82jcw.jpg
Keep in mind that my anatomy is pretty blah...I just tried to get the gist of it. :I

(Edited on February 28, 2009, 8:05 pm)

Loveless @ Saturday, February 28th 2009, 4:46 PM

Yeah. I'd say out.

you anatomy needs some work my love, you need to make your doggies longer~Remember, there's rib cages and stuff inside thar, so. And the back leg ankles are up to high-

http://www.visuallee.com/weblog/images/3_4dogs_sm.jpg
http://www.greatdanelady.com/Images/dog_legs_hod_3.jpg
http://portraitxpress.files.wordpress.com/2008/11/anatomy-1-dog.jpg

Give me some bonesss~In my meaning, Those legs look to loose, and your necks are a bit too short darling, but don't go out and turn them into giraffes n__n

Mhm okay, now thats all I got.

(Edited on February 28, 2009, 4:56 pm)

(Edited on March 7, 2009, 11:49 am)

Moo @ Sunday, March 1st 2009, 9:17 PM

I say you're ALMOST there. I'm still a little shaky with the standards here, but I can tell you're around the skill level.
Just a little more practice and you'll get in C:
(and listen to those guy's crits. they are seriously helpful if you really read them and consider what they're saying)

Daisoku @ Tuesday, March 3rd 2009, 1:44 PM

Alright, Thank you guys, for all your comments.
I'll practise some more, then try again some other time.

Konekochan16 @ Friday, March 6th 2009, 12:45 AM

I might be a bit late, but maybe this blackline can help you a bit more?

http://img21.imageshack.us/img21/8990/70750343.png

GOOD LUCK!

(Edited on March 6, 2009, 12:46 am)

ShaoShao @ Saturday, March 7th 2009, 10:43 AM

Loveless, I hope you realise how wrong that comment on anatomy in cartoon animals is.

lenny @ Sunday, March 8th 2009, 8:26 AM

if your cartooning you must know the rules in order to break them.

(Edited on March 9, 2009, 9:29 pm)

Loveless @ Sunday, March 8th 2009, 6:13 PM

I was only trying to critique.

but i guess I won't mention about cartoon styles next time...

ShaoShao @ Tuesday, March 10th 2009, 2:39 PM

As Lenny said, even to create a cartoon you need to know the basics of anatomy. Unless it's abstract, a cartoon will have an anatomical structure to each living character.

It's perfectly acceptable to look at Disney and so on to understand how people depict aspects of real anatomy. It's not a substitute by far, but it does have real anatomy in its foundations. Saying otherwise is a falsity.

(Edited on March 10, 2009, 2:40 pm)

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lenny @ Wednesday, February 25th 2009, 10:43 PM

So uhm
im just gonna say this is finished because...i really just want it done and over with XD;
if i mess with this anymore im afraid im going to mess it up so.
Critic away :x

IN : x x x x x
OUT :
BorderLine :

(Edited on February 28, 2009, 5:56 pm)

(Edited on March 2, 2009, 1:40 pm)

(Edited on March 8, 2009, 8:27 am)

Toasteh @ Wednesday, February 25th 2009, 10:55 PM

Auuugh finish sooooooon
You have such a cool style qwq

Bixie-Bee @ Thursday, February 26th 2009, 8:25 PM

lol, yay for lots of information!
but it looks awesome so far! I <3 your anatomy skills

lenny @ Thursday, February 26th 2009, 11:51 PM

th-thanks but i adore your coloring D:

Detective Wolf @ Friday, February 27th 2009, 1:24 AM

dfmskfms;
that little face cracked me up so bad fkslfjla

lenny @ Friday, February 27th 2009, 1:25 AM

i bet it did.

darkvine @ Friday, February 27th 2009, 10:21 PM

woah this is great looking
cant wait to see it finished

Loveless @ Saturday, February 28th 2009, 1:03 PM

mmmmmmm

I am loving those colors.

Damnit woman, your amazinggginggg

Daisoku @ Saturday, February 28th 2009, 1:24 PM

That is.
So cool.

I'm not in here but you should be.

Toasteh @ Saturday, February 28th 2009, 3:41 PM

I really wish you could've worked on this more. D:

ANYWAY, I VOTE IN

You meet the "Standards" pretty well...and I really don't have time to critique bawww D:

BUT ANYWAY GET'CHUR BOOTY IN HERE
AND GIMME A PCHAT LINK SO WE CAN PCHAT
AND DETECTIVIE CAN STALK US

Detective Wolf @ Sunday, March 1st 2009, 12:16 AM

yes in that face still cracks me up

lenny @ Sunday, March 1st 2009, 9:35 AM

lol@Detective;;

Moo @ Sunday, March 1st 2009, 9:18 PM

hey you
yeah you
inplz

Bixie-Bee @ Sunday, March 1st 2009, 11:23 PM

DANGG
you got a whole thing going here, it's not just a picture on a background it's a picture with a background, it's like, without the background the picture would loose some emotion.
this is CRAZY awesome, lol, I think after this, try out for advanced too, you'd get along there so well too!

lenny @ Monday, March 2nd 2009, 1:39 PM

DX <33 you guys are too nice;;;

Ichigo @ Friday, March 6th 2009, 7:54 PM

In. The detail is amazing. THAT FOOT. I love that foot. This pic really makes you wonder what happened.

Loveless @ Friday, March 6th 2009, 11:39 PM

oh btw~

in.

lenny @ Friday, March 6th 2009, 11:51 PM

@everyone above :X

THANK YOU.
YOU ARE DA BOMB.
:x you guys are so cool.

:x do i need more votes?

(Edited on March 6, 2009, 11:52 pm)

Toasteh @ Tuesday, March 10th 2009, 11:25 AM

I think this is enough |D;

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Thudd @ Wednesday, February 25th 2009, 1:53 AM

try out

s.s
NUMBER ONE

(Edited on February 25, 2009, 1:53 am)

Toasteh @ Wednesday, February 25th 2009, 11:34 AM

Finish soon!

tigerchic643 @ Wednesday, February 25th 2009, 4:15 PM

i luv the pose.
finish soon!

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lenny @ Tuesday, February 24th 2009, 11:02 PM

TIS FINISHED...
well as finished as it'll get anyway XD;;;
:333...ermmm
Yeah hi.

(Edited on February 25, 2009, 10:25 pm)

POLYGONS;; @ Tuesday, February 24th 2009, 11:21 PM

Really great perspective!
Good luck :3
<333

lenny @ Tuesday, February 24th 2009, 11:23 PM

th-thanks D: <33 you too :]

Toasteh @ Wednesday, February 25th 2009, 11:33 AM

Ahh yes good luck!
You probably shouldn've have many problems getting in, newer oekakis tend to have lower standards. C:
BUT NOT THAT IT SHOULD MATTER BECAUSE YOUR STYLE IS COOL.

tigerchic643 @ Wednesday, February 25th 2009, 4:14 PM

this is so amazing so far.
please finish soon. =]

lenny @ Wednesday, February 25th 2009, 4:15 PM

toast.. do you have another account somewhere?
maybe uhh, sron or something?

edit:
thanks @ both btw XD

(Edited on February 25, 2009, 4:15 pm)

(Edited by Toasteh)
I started drawing again at Sutaro Sketcher as Spartacus. C:
I probably won't be there very much though...
Oh yeah, and I lurk a little at SRON as Toasteh...I'll try to tryout soon. C:

lenny @ Wednesday, February 25th 2009, 6:01 PM

ah i see.
i dont go to sron anymore..haha;
i dont know why though im more of the pchat type of person.
but i guess i like it here better, its more calmer.

(Edited by Toasteh)
Yeah, I like it better here too. |D;
If this place becomes as chaotic as Sutaro I might consider leaving...but I probably won't...I'm a really nostalic person and I've been here for two years so...I have a sort of patriotism towards Weazie. C:
And I loooove pchat but I haven't in...a long time...

~
Dude me eitherrrr. we should totally do it together!
not now though = w= im SUPPOSED to be writing a paper;; ha..ha..ha...

(Edited on February 25, 2009, 6:38 pm)

Detective Wolf @ Wednesday, February 25th 2009, 7:53 PM

dude good luck!!
and I might have to stalk my way into a pchat that you guys have

lenny @ Wednesday, February 25th 2009, 7:54 PM

pshh you dont have to stalk i give you link you just tell me when ;D

Toasteh @ Wednesday, February 25th 2009, 10:54 PM

IT'S DONE CRIT TIME!

Hmmm well my human anatomy isn't that great. :I
WELL THEN!
The shading, especially on the grass, looks a bit rushed 'n sloppy, but hey, who am I to talk right? -shot-
Well I REALLY LIKE PERSPECTIVE. JUST SO YOU PEOPLE TRYING OUT KNOW, PERSPECTIVE IS A PRETTY BIG WIN IN MY BOOK, ESPECIALLY WHEN YOU CAN PULL IT OFF LIKE THIS.
It's just a bit off, and when drawing perspective please remember that shading gets darker the farther away the subject is from the light source, in this case I'm assuming the sun?
I see you paid attention to that just below the knees but the rest of the pants could be darker as well (UNLESS of course those pants are made of a very reflective material, but it looks to me like jeans).
The background perspective is just a weeee bit off. what we have going on here is a term referred to as 'tilted perspective'--obvious meaning. The tree almost appears to be falling down, the flower's perspecitve just a little bit off. AND WE'RE MISISNG SOMETHING HERE.
SHADOW!!
FIGURES CAST SHADOW!
UH-OH!
WE GOT A SEVERE CASE OF PETER PAN SYNDROME!
The tree leaves should also be casting a shadow, and because of the leaves it would probably cast a really splotchy-looking one.

OTHER THAN THAT YOU PULLED THIS OFF QUITE NICELY.
I won't crit on the anatomy, I'll leave that to the more knowledgeable of it, but YEAH.
LOOKING FORWARD TO THAT NEXT TRYOUT.

AND SEND ME A LINK TO A PCHAT 'CAUSE I WANNAAAAA D:
AND WE CAN HAS A DETECTIVIE STALKER

Detective Wolf @ Thursday, February 26th 2009, 10:12 PM

/stalk /stalk /stalk

(Edited by Toasteh)
STALKERRRRR IMA CALL DAH POHLEES

Detective Wolf @ Friday, February 27th 2009, 1:25 AM

e-police doesn't scare me! >:3

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Real @ Monday, February 23rd 2009, 9:55 PM

Tryout 1
unfinished

fusion @ Monday, February 23rd 2009, 9:57 PM

D'aww this is so cute <3
good luck

Toasteh @ Monday, February 23rd 2009, 10:06 PM

Ahh yes finish soon. C:
I'm looking forward to seeing what you do with this!

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Anne Dyari @ Sunday, February 22nd 2009, 5:15 PM

haven't played with this character in years XD

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tigerchic643 @ Sunday, February 22nd 2009, 3:53 PM

an icon for izzyah.=]

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tigerchic643 @ Sunday, February 22nd 2009, 12:42 PM

fjshdfskfns OMFG WATERCOLORS ARE SO MUCH FUNN!!!!!!!!!

Toasteh @ Sunday, February 22nd 2009, 1:15 PM

I KNOW RIGHT??

I'M ADDICTED <333

tigerchic643 @ Tuesday, February 24th 2009, 6:08 PM

SJHFDSKDBSKDA YES XD.

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Bixie-Bee @ Sunday, February 15th 2009, 1:06 PM

GUH!
as done as it gets! my Java was acting up (giving me a Java E when I was uploading the highlighting, but I hope this point is okay enough)
*goes to find a mod to bump it up*
Also ^^; sorry about the time, school started again and well, I was busy

(Edited on February 15, 2009, 12:54 am)

POODLEPEE @ Thursday, January 29th 2009, 12:02 AM

This lookes like its going to be amazing.
Good luck.

Hazuza @ Thursday, January 29th 2009, 2:19 AM

....
*Kicks you to advanced*

(Edited by Toasteh)
I KICK YOUS IN DAH FAEC. >C

Bixie-Bee @ Thursday, January 29th 2009, 11:07 AM

*hides* but I don't wanna go there yet, I like it here :< lol

Toasteh @ Thursday, January 29th 2009, 11:13 AM

Oh lawd we need more people drawing here anyway. -kicks Hazu-

Kunaike @ Thursday, January 29th 2009, 7:42 PM

The lineart is so clean and prettyyy *u*
-kicksself- lol

Hazuza @ Friday, January 30th 2009, 12:18 AM

yuh but then you can draw in both places lawl D8>

... And STOP EDITZING MAH POSTS D8<

(Edited on January 30, 2009, 12:20 am)

(Edited by Toasteh)
Muahahahaha >D
(Edited by Arf)
tee hee eue

Toasteh @ Sunday, February 15th 2009, 1:47 PM

IN.

I don't have time to crit a lot, but all I really have to say is that the bg is a little out of perspective, and the head is just a weeee bit too small. I tend to do that a lot. :C
The legs are also a little off, mainly the hind legs, but it isn't the first thing I jump to. I'd redline if I could, but I can't so sldkfj

BUT THAT SHADING IS BEAUTIFUL, GOD, IF I COULD SHADE LIKE THAT. The only thing I would correct on it is maybe making it look more fluffy on the tail.

But yeah, other than that GET'CHUR MAGNIFICANT BOOTY IN HERE. I'm a bad critter. C:

Anne Dyari @ Sunday, February 15th 2009, 1:49 PM

IN. XP omg, love those paws.

tigerchic643 @ Sunday, February 15th 2009, 3:43 PM

hlkfksdjsald this is so BEAUTIFUL!!!
get ur a** in here!

Hazuza @ Tuesday, February 17th 2009, 1:46 AM

omfg pretty.

Yeah, in. it's luff xD
I especially lovethe background...

A short crit, the main thing that sticks out to me is the anatomy. just a little.. I think mainly the front paws, which look kind of short. You should've continued the line in the front a bit further up o3o; The chest also seems kind of low/big...

Other than that, I just think you could've done some darker shading~ It kind of fits though, since snow creates reflection that makes shading lighter *-* Maybe just on the ground.

I really love that back paw for some reason o3o

Jazzy @ Thursday, February 19th 2009, 6:29 PM

in!
this is lovely, i adore the soft shading and how you drew the fur c:

also the face is really nice

issi_007 @ Friday, February 20th 2009, 6:01 AM

In <3
I love this concept c:
And that background is really awesome 8D

Arf @ Friday, February 20th 2009, 12:40 PM

sounds like you're in~ n_n I think I'm going to start over on my first tryout ^^;;; but congrats to you!~

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tigerchic643 @ Saturday, February 14th 2009, 4:27 PM

to drepressed to finish.

Toasteh @ Saturday, February 14th 2009, 6:51 PM

RAWRG DON'T BE DEPRESSED >:C
-happyrainbow-

Anne Dyari @ Sunday, February 15th 2009, 1:17 AM

awww, you should finish this, I love that tail!

POLYGONS;; @ Sunday, February 15th 2009, 11:01 AM

/spaz
It...it's a gas mask...
This is beautiful!!!
Finish!
<333

Arf @ Friday, February 20th 2009, 12:42 PM

*doan wry b happeh now~~*
<333 I LIKE DIS HERE CREATURE<3 is beautifully unique!

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Anne Dyari @ Thursday, February 12th 2009, 1:34 AM

been alittle depressed of late, my boyfriend of now... three years joined the marine corps, and doesn't have much time to write, and little to no computor access.
Most of friends have boyfriends/girlfriends, and most are really careful around me, but two couples have been making out at every turn. I feel like I'm being overly sensitive, but it really bugs me.

ah, I just needed to vent I guess ^^;

Bixie-Bee @ Thursday, February 12th 2009, 11:30 AM

*pets* naw, I get the same way, especially around valentine's day... though.. lol, I'm more like.. without boyfriend...
but... if you think of it.. for you, when he gets time to see you or write to you, it'll just seem so wonderful that I'm sure your friends will look at their partners and be like... why can't you do that for me??
But I'm sure he's thinking of you and misses you just as much!

Taz @ Friday, February 20th 2009, 10:24 AM

that definately is not fun :c

i suppose i understand what you are talking about. the same thing happens to me but on a much smaller scale. i never see my boyfriend but my friend and her boyfriend make out whenever they are together. i dont see him because he lives a half hour away...although i do think your situation is much worse. i do hope he returns home and safe and that everything works out for you two.

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fusion @ Tuesday, February 10th 2009, 9:02 PM

because it had to happen eventully :
fff sorry for the undertimed ness i have to get off my computer . . . . because I was banned gafsdfslj

(Edited on February 10, 2009, 9:03 pm)

Anne Dyari @ Wednesday, February 11th 2009, 9:51 AM

Good luck! can't wait to see this finished!

Toasteh @ Saturday, February 14th 2009, 10:51 PM

OH YES, FINISH SOON YES??

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tigerchic643 @ Tuesday, February 10th 2009, 5:58 PM

jdshfks just a doodle of my char Reason/
[wip]

Anne Dyari @ Wednesday, February 11th 2009, 9:52 AM

cute pose ^^ -leeeeeeean-

tigerchic643 @ Thursday, February 12th 2009, 6:42 PM

thanx. =]

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