Weazie Oekaki Intermediate

Weazie Oekaki Intermediate
	Welcome to Weazie Oekaki's critique & improvement board! Before drawing, please read the rules at this link ^{Updates: AH SURVEY'S CLOSED finally after like. months?? like 4 months. incredible. ((I'll be posting a summary of responses etc soon)) - Toasteh, 08 May 2014}
Weekly Theme: Water! - Local Admins: Anne Dyari

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tigerchic643 @ Saturday, April 4th 2009, 8:05 PM

dgjhdfkjfsdkf really dont feel like finishing DX.

Toasteh @ Sunday, April 5th 2009, 3:44 PM

But you should.

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Loveless @ Saturday, April 4th 2009, 6:57 PM

Neopet commission..

argh i need to draw here more D:

Toasteh @ Saturday, April 4th 2009, 7:20 PM

ME TOO. WE SHOULD DRAW THIS PLACE UP.
dflksjd I love your style. <3

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Anne Dyari @ Wednesday, April 1st 2009, 1:17 AM

Weekly Theme. XD

I got mah bling on.

Toasteh @ Wednesday, April 1st 2009, 5:57 PM

WORD.

Detective Wolf @ Thursday, April 2nd 2009, 12:37 AM

fo shizzle

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Anne Dyari @ Saturday, March 28th 2009, 12:14 AM

gaia commish

Loveless @ Saturday, March 28th 2009, 12:22 PM

Ohhh this is great, I love the hat.

Voodoo @ Sunday, March 29th 2009, 9:55 PM

this is a cool, efficient style for commissions like that <:

What's your Gaia? -just made one lol-

(Edited by Anne Dyari)
It's 'Unborn Fetus Mafia' XP

t-that is an amazing username
mine is Voodoo-sama lol

(Edited on March 30, 2009, 5:05 pm)

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Crescent @ Thursday, March 26th 2009, 10:19 PM

S.S
not Finished

Loveless @ Saturday, March 28th 2009, 12:22 PM

Finish soon! its looking amazing so far!

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Ichigo @ Monday, March 23rd 2009, 12:14 AM

s.s

Anne Dyari @ Monday, March 23rd 2009, 12:32 AM

I see a tongue XP

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Anne Dyari @ Sunday, March 22nd 2009, 6:34 PM

just a quick doodle, playing with dodge tool and a new angle.

Timer lies XD majorly.

Random @ Monday, March 23rd 2009, 9:45 PM

;lkgsfdh the background is amazinggg.. i like the purples

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Applesauce @ Sunday, March 22nd 2009, 6:16 PM

I don't know whats up with that pose >:(

Timer lies i took a shower

Anne Dyari @ Sunday, March 22nd 2009, 6:37 PM

Adorable pose, next time though, if you could put more detail into the the background, like maybe adding more detail in the grass and fur, and perhaps smoothing your lines?

LOVE the motion of this though, and those paws, perfect XP Can't wait to see your next tryout!

Moo @ Monday, March 23rd 2009, 8:39 PM

hmm well, the only thing I see wrong with this, besides what Anne pointed out, is that the body is too small compared to the head. And the light source is a little confusing, because on the yellow dog it looks like it's coming from our point of view, while on the brown dog it looks like it's coming from the yellow dog. If it was coming from the yellow dog, the gars would also be lit around where the yellow dog is laying.
Other than that good luck C:

Voodoo @ Sunday, March 29th 2009, 10:11 PM

This is very cute. I love the idea of it, and how you experimented with perspective and tried to make something different.

However, there are a few things I want to point out. You did a pretty good job with the limbs and paws, but the necks of the two dogs are off. The head of the brown dog is too large and the neck is not long enough, or the shoulders are too far up. The yellow dog's neck is way too thin and needs to be thickened. The yellow dog's nose does not look like that at that angle...I wish i could redline but I don't have my tablet. it's kinda hard to explain.

Your shading is okay on the subject matter albeit a bit messy. You need to define more high lights in your picture, they seem to just be concentrated in very limited areas. It is hard to shade a light colour such as yellow, I understand, but I'd like to see more shading on the yellow dog. The lineart is a bit messy, if you cleaned it up and thinned it in some places it'd make the picture look a lot more polished. For the background it's a start, but it looks rushed. Try taking a little more time on the grass and making the background interact with the character.

Anyways, good luck!

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Khadyah @ Saturday, March 21st 2009, 3:16 PM

Done ^-^;;;

(Edited on March 21, 2009, 9:04 pm)

Anne Dyari @ Sunday, March 22nd 2009, 1:25 PM

I'm going to have to say out. My main crit is the limbs, the front fore limb cannot bend that low, and even a straightened limb has some motion to it. The back legs are an issue for everyone, but try looking at a dog as refference, there are three bending points, not just two.

I do, though, really like your shading, and how you did take my advice and integrate the background in more, but still, I reccomend using a refference next time. I hope you come back and tryout again! ^^

A quick redline http://i40.tinypic.com/24nfjav.png

Khadyah @ Sunday, March 22nd 2009, 7:45 PM

O:> oh ok. And thanks for the redline

Toasteh @ Monday, March 23rd 2009, 5:33 PM

Okay, Anne covered most of the crits but I'd like to go on.

The heads are large, but I'll leave that to style. What bothers me about them is that the perspective on them is, well...off. On your green character the eyes show a 3/4 view on the face, while the muzzle says differently. The nose should be more to the front--simply changing the nose's position makes a world of a difference.
As for the face of the white dog, for the most part, you got it correct. I would only suggest looking at more reference. http://kimballstock.com --BOOKMARK IT.

As for the bodies, it doesn't look like you have much of a knowledge of the structure of them. SERIOUSLY, go to that site I showed you above and look up dog or whatever you want to look up. Tell me now, what do we notice? Well your necks (And well, the bodies in general) are rather thin. I hope I'm not being mean when I say the characters look like long-legged ferrets? But yes, the bodies should be much thicker--there're bones and organs and such, you know!

I'd also like to say that I love your shading style, but the shading itself is a bit off. I mean, they're under trees and such right? I'd also like to see you give your characters a little more depth.

I'm going to have to say out for now, honey. I don't think we're quite up to par yet, but all I can suggest is that you go out and STUDY STUDY STUDY for the next six weeks. Make sure you bookmark that site I showed you! Trust me, it helps A LOT. I drew this without reference-- http://i43.tinypic.com/e7gv48.png this-- http://i40.tinypic.com/34dmmn5.png with. Can you see the difference?
Also make sure you study an animal's bone structure, muscles, etc. You can also grab a living animal and just...watch it run...stand...sit...everything, to get an idea of how those bones and muscles are being put to work. If you don't have the time to study all those bones and such, just...hug a puppy. C:

Alright then, I've provided a basic redline-- http://i42.tinypic.com/2dkydsh.jpg

I hope to see you here again in six weeks. I don't think you have much farther to go before being accepted.

Moo @ Monday, March 23rd 2009, 8:46 PM

You have plenty of crits, so I'm not going to add any more here. But good luck on your next tryouts!

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Anne Dyari @ Thursday, March 19th 2009, 11:09 PM

XP tomato man. Bwahahahahaha!

Kyuubi-Kitsune @ Friday, March 20th 2009, 9:48 AM

aaaaa it's Bob!! Bob the tomato!! lol this is too cute, your style's amazing! <3

Toasteh @ Saturday, March 21st 2009, 12:31 AM

GIVE HIM BACK TO FARMER JOHN NOOOOWWWWW MR. TOMATO MISSES HIS HOME HE HAS A WIFE AND KIDS YOU MONSTERRRRR

Ahsoka @ Tuesday, March 24th 2009, 1:28 PM

wait.....wheres Larry the cucumber?

(Edited by Anne Dyari)
He's a pickle now >:)

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Khadyah @ Thursday, March 19th 2009, 11:58 AM

It's been I while so I thought why not tryout again ^-^; FYI, it's a kangaroo. I'm sorry for choosing an animal with such strange anatomy but I love them and I had this picture in my head 8D

Ok the brb may have been weird but I wanted to comment more but I had to leave ^-^; akdhdka but now I forgot what I was going to say D:> um... PLEASE CRIT -flee- and and the wings stink .-.

(Edited on March 19, 2009, 7:37 pm)

Anne Dyari @ Thursday, March 19th 2009, 10:39 PM

This is really stylized, making it awkward to crit, but the arm looks attatched alittle too foreward, and there's no shoulder. Maybe also have abit more of the upper bend part of the leg be more prominent.
https://www.northrup.org/Photos/Kangaroo/low/kangaroo-laying8.jpg <-- good example of kangaroo legs

Other than that, I wouldn've liked to see more highlights and interaction with the background, but the shading is smooth and and lines are clean. Cute design too, good luck on your next tryout ^^

Toasteh @ Saturday, March 21st 2009, 3:05 PM

I think Anne pretty much covered it but I'd like to add one thing--
Wings? They don't look a whole lot like that. :I
I'm sure this is a fantasy character but fantasy does take up its roots in reality.
I can't redline or anything atm but I would recommend using references when you draw, it's a huge help.
A good stock site is http://kimballstock.com, I end up using it a lot. C:

Khadyah @ Saturday, March 21st 2009, 3:24 PM

@ Tosteh: Yeaaaaah I realize I messed up very badly on the wings ^-^; I'm originally not very good drawing feathery wings plus I added after I started on the lineart because I forgot them...

(Edited by Toasteh)
HARHAR I'm not good at wings either. >u>
I just recommend reference and practice--and not just for wings, it's helpful for poses and anatomy as well!

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POLYGONS;; @ Sunday, March 15th 2009, 12:32 AM

EDIT
Done. It's crap, I know.

(Edited on March 18, 2009, 10:21 pm)

Random @ Sunday, March 15th 2009, 2:25 PM

ohgosh I love the lineart

Toasteh @ Sunday, March 15th 2009, 4:47 PM

^iawtc

Konekochan16 @ Tuesday, March 17th 2009, 10:21 PM

IMA LOVING THOSE PANTSUZ

Anne Dyari @ Thursday, March 19th 2009, 9:46 AM

It's not crap, the colors are very vibrant!

My only crits are that there is no highlights, other shadows on her hair, though it is quite cool looking, and her legs look a tad short. Maybe try zooming out and making sure everything is the right proportion in the sketch?

Last crit, and it's not that big, maybe add more weight to her, like, have the bed sinking around her alittle, most mattresses have alittle give to them, and maybe shadow those folds to give them a more weighted effect.

Other than that, Love the hair, the sleeve, the jeans, and I want to own those headphones XD

tigerchic643 @ Thursday, March 19th 2009, 6:36 PM

jdflgkdjfdfgmd this is sssooo cute.
i like ur shading and lines.

cant wait for ur second XD.

POLYGONS;; @ Monday, March 23rd 2009, 9:58 PM

May I please get some more crits?
I really don't think there's only the two minor things that Anne mentioned...

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tigerchic643 @ Thursday, March 12th 2009, 7:49 PM

jdhfgkdsjflkdf i really havent drawn here lately so here is a spam pick DX.

timerlies i had to do stuff.

Anne Dyari @ Thursday, March 19th 2009, 9:47 AM

Love the softness of the lines XP

tigerchic643 @ Thursday, March 19th 2009, 6:37 PM

thanx XD.

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Groggy @ Wednesday, March 11th 2009, 4:52 PM

Yeahh. I haven't really had a chance to sit down and oekaki. ;; I miss it.

And I haven't drawn on the intermediate board so I figured I would.

Anyway, felt like drawing a bat. Enjoy.

Referenced used: http://www.flickr.com/photos/66504007@N00/2104022820/

Random @ Wednesday, March 11th 2009, 8:00 PM

oh lawd this is beautiful
i love bats <3

Toasteh @ Wednesday, March 11th 2009, 10:14 PM

Bats are so cute baww qwq

Jackii @ Saturday, March 14th 2009, 11:33 PM

YOU SHOULD TRY AND FIND MORE TIME WOMAN I MISS YOU SO MUCHH ; ^;;;
this is so gorgeous gosh i love those raindrops and your lineless in general is beautiful. and and the little claws awwwww this is so cute i love your semi-realism it makes my day.

1Riotmaker7 @ Friday, December 18th 2009, 2:48 PM

He's awesome!!!

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Random @ Tuesday, March 10th 2009, 9:00 PM

arg i don't have the patcience to finish this today </3
maybe tomorrow.

Random @ Tuesday, March 10th 2009, 9:08 PM

ah f--
it looks like the picture below

Toasteh @ Tuesday, March 10th 2009, 9:10 PM

NONO FINISH THIS IT'LL BE FUNNY
WE'LL HAVE A WHOLE BUNCH OF PEOPLE COME OVER HERE AND DRAW EVERYTHING IN THE SAME POSE!
SERIOUSLY, IT'LL BE HILARIOUS I'M LAUGHING JUST THINKING ABOUT IT!

Random @ Tuesday, March 10th 2009, 9:12 PM

LMAO TOTALLY
I DIDN'T EVEN LOOK AT YOUR PICTURE XD I JUST LIKE.. SKIPPED OVER IT AND DREW THIS AND THEN I WAS LIKE... OH SHI--

<3

Toasteh @ Tuesday, March 10th 2009, 9:28 PM

Ohoho it's the theme now XDDD
THIS IS GOING TO BE A FUN ONE <3

Random @ Wednesday, March 11th 2009, 8:43 PM

i guess.. it's done now.

Toasteh @ Wednesday, March 11th 2009, 9:55 PM

OKAY THEN
For crits...I'm not really sure what to say as this is mostly just my personal opinion

Well I think a little more could've been done with the water, but I won't count it against you seeing as how I can't do water...at all :C
As for the grass, I don't think it should look just like that. There are lots of little grass blades of different sizes that really shouldn't be...sticking up in the same direction as in your picture. At least not in the wild anyway, which is where this looks like is taking place. Wild grass also should have more variation in types of grass and weeds.
http://i.pbase.com/g4/83/568283/2/61510501.Kansas2006FieldsofWildGrass.jpg
http://www.mnsphoto.com/n_images_SA/SV_img_9625.jpg
http://farm1.static.flickr.com/48/139797540_965d1b9db5.jpg?v=0
As for anatomy the leg farthest away from the viewer is just a little too short.
I can't really crit much on poses like this. |D;
But I will tell you that the face is little off, I would just suggest googling some pictures because I'm too lazy to do it myself. /fail
I really wish you would've put just a little more effort into the squirrel. :C
The blood looks pretty unrealistic, although I can see what you were going for. C:

I'll go ahead and say in. |D

(Edited on March 12, 2009, 10:56 am)

Random @ Thursday, March 12th 2009, 7:58 PM

WELL it was pretty hard for this because i did this all on one layer.. dsgdfj and got lazy.

BUT I SEE WHAT YOU MEAN, thank you! <333

(Edited on March 12, 2009, 7:59 pm)

Random @ Sunday, March 15th 2009, 2:24 PM

this is a tryout you guys know, right. >:c

Detective Wolf @ Thursday, March 19th 2009, 7:34 PM

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