Weazie Oekaki Intermediate

Weazie Oekaki Intermediate
	Welcome to Weazie Oekaki's critique & improvement board! Before drawing, please read the rules at this link ^{Updates: AH SURVEY'S CLOSED finally after like. months?? like 4 months. incredible. ((I'll be posting a summary of responses etc soon)) - Toasteh, 08 May 2014}
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ShiPainter
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Anne Dyari @ Friday, January 1st 2010, 2:22 AM

happy new year! Go get some sleep, you darn drunkards xD

ryonyanko @ Friday, January 1st 2010, 10:10 AM

happy happy new year!~

soulwithin465 @ Saturday, January 2nd 2010, 8:35 AM

AHH HAPPY NEW YEAR~!!!

And I must say this is a pretty sweet picture! Lovin the lighting~

chainedfox @ Saturday, January 2nd 2010, 12:20 PM

happy new year!

Kyuubi-Kitsune @ Saturday, January 2nd 2010, 3:37 PM

yay sleepy characters
Happy New Year to you too!!

Arf @ Wednesday, January 6th 2010, 9:23 PM

HAPPY NEWISH YEAR!!

ShiPainter
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ryonyanko @ Thursday, December 31st 2009, 6:16 PM

I am saving because I am paranoid...

soulwithin465 @ Thursday, December 31st 2009, 7:48 PM

Oh this is looking wonderful!
Good Luck~!!
<3

ryonyanko @ Friday, January 1st 2010, 9:45 AM

i'm afraid to ask, how many times can i "retouch"? only once, right? blah

i'm afraid my computer will close itself before i finish lul

Please someone tell me lol!

(Edited on January 1, 2010, 7:04 pm)

soulwithin465 @ Saturday, January 2nd 2010, 8:32 AM

You should be able to retouch as many times as you want! But I personally have trouble with it at times...just make sure you take screen shots regularly~

ShiPainter
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Majestic Cardboard Box @ Wednesday, December 30th 2009, 10:45 PM

Quick ref for one of my characters

(Edited on December 30, 2009, 10:46 pm)

soulwithin465 @ Thursday, December 31st 2009, 7:28 PM

Whoa this is wicked cool! Awesome mouth too~

Majestic Cardboard Box @ Friday, January 1st 2010, 5:04 PM

Thank you

Kyuubi-Kitsune @ Saturday, January 2nd 2010, 3:38 PM

Whoa, that's epic! Very cool :3

ShiPainter

soulwithin465 @ Tuesday, December 29th 2009, 11:22 PM

>3<

(Edited on December 30, 2009, 12:14 am)

ryonyanko @ Friday, January 1st 2010, 10:17 AM

>3<

Kyuubi-Kitsune @ Saturday, January 2nd 2010, 3:38 PM

>3< love the cheeks

ShiPainter
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soulwithin465 @ Tuesday, December 29th 2009, 11:04 PM

Just got back from Japan yesterday >A<
I stayed in Tokyo for a week with just a friend and my sis. Ah it was so fun~!

Also my b-day was last week so now I'm 18!

So how is everyone doing?? What have you done over the holiday break?? ...if you have one...

<3

ryonyanko @ Friday, January 1st 2010, 10:18 AM

i don't have a holiday break but coming back from japan must been awesome.

welcome back!

soulwithin465 @ Saturday, January 2nd 2010, 8:34 AM

Aw no holiday break?? Mind if I ask why??

And yes it's a pretty sweet feeling~ But I miss it v.v

ryonyanko @ Saturday, January 2nd 2010, 11:29 AM

i'd miss it too damn lol. i work at an airport so we never close, thus no holiday ;_;

chainedfox @ Saturday, January 2nd 2010, 12:21 PM

i bet u had fun, i wish i could go

i love this background by the way

soulwithin465 @ Saturday, January 2nd 2010, 1:03 PM

Ahh thank you~

Kyuubi-Kitsune @ Saturday, January 2nd 2010, 3:38 PM

JAPAN!?!?! Awesome!!! sdfjkghj that must have been an incredible experience
lol I love the colors of this Cx

soulwithin465 @ Saturday, January 2nd 2010, 5:04 PM

Ah yes, it was an incredible experience indeed~!

And thank you <3

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Majestic Cardboard Box @ Saturday, December 26th 2009, 7:30 PM

Sorry for being so inactive my computer is really slow and is running out of memory (even though we have almost nothing on it >:( )

(Edited on December 26, 2009, 7:31 pm)

Anne Dyari @ Saturday, December 26th 2009, 8:02 PM

That's alright, just stop by when you can ^^

This is really pretty, loving the simplicity!

soulwithin465 @ Tuesday, December 29th 2009, 10:23 PM

Ah the atmosphere is wonderful~!
Such pretty colors. I just wana jump on in there and sit on a cloud myself >3<

ShiPainter
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issi_007 @ Saturday, December 26th 2009, 1:40 PM

Just fooling around.

Fff my tablet doesn't lag like the other one did. It feels nice to draw quickly <3

Wait wait, I'm allowed to draw here if I'm accepted at Advanced, right? c:

Anne Dyari @ Saturday, December 26th 2009, 8:01 PM

xP This is so flowy and intricate! Very cool ^^

And yes, being accepted into advanced gets you in here too ^^

issi_007 @ Sunday, December 27th 2009, 3:16 PM

Aww thanks <33
Yay c:

Fl?ss @ Tuesday, December 29th 2009, 11:30 AM

mmm, this is lovely
you always seem to manage to combinate colors so well, and those flowy shapes are pretty

soulwithin465 @ Tuesday, December 29th 2009, 10:21 PM

Mmmm I'm just loving those colors and textures~!

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Anne Dyari @ Saturday, December 26th 2009, 11:46 AM

maybe might finish another time, solids are EVIL

ShiPainter
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Majestic Cardboard Box @ Saturday, December 19th 2009, 6:17 PM

I'm pretty sure i'm accepted here

(Edited on December 19, 2009, 6:18 pm)

soulwithin465 @ Sunday, December 20th 2009, 7:12 AM

This is one wicked cool icon!

Anne Dyari @ Sunday, December 20th 2009, 5:25 PM

Yeah, you're in xP Cute icon!

Kyuubi-Kitsune @ Tuesday, December 22nd 2009, 6:54 PM

Yep, you're in
grrr, Im jealous of your pixeling skills >:D

Majestic Cardboard Box @ Saturday, December 26th 2009, 7:10 PM

Yhank you guys

ShiPainter
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Khadyah @ Saturday, December 19th 2009, 3:33 PM

-sigh- Done <:3 I'm sorry that I'm bad at backgrounds, I haven't had much practice in them |D;

(Edited on December 20, 2009, 10:04 pm)

Toasteh @ Monday, December 21st 2009, 3:16 PM

Just a tip: if there's something you /know/ you aren't good at, it's a good idea to work on them before trying out here. What we're looking for (As far as I know) is a decent grip on anatomy, perspective, etc. but I think you could work on some things.
Speaking anatomically, the thing that stood out the most to me was the length difference of the arms. UMM. THERE ARE. OTHER THINGS. But I'm terrible at explaining things so I'll...do a basic redline.
I know you draw in a cartoon-y style, but it is important to have a solid foundation to work off of when you stylize something. I did think this was a cat at first glance though, so props there.
http://i50.tinypic.com/2uxz5sx.png
It's probs pretty bad, sorry!! I tried to keep your style in mind so...haha.
Well the torso was a bit long, so I shortened that...the legs (To me, anyway) didn't show much movement, assuming he's walking down the street. This might help you with that, or alternately you could take a trip to youtube haha...
Now the head is pretty huge...but that's okay, because in a style like this it doesn't stick out so much. In my redline...it totally does...but OKAY well this person pulled off the "Big head, small neck" stylization REALLY WELL, so that's kind of what I thought of: http://hellodingo.deviantart.com/art/kate-is-not-happy-about-this-146817933
When you draw an anthro like this, it's important to remember that it should be more animal than human; that's the appeal. So it would be helpful to study/sketch/whatever the skeletal and muscular structure of humans and whatever animal it's supposed to be.
...ehh just a tip, haha.

I'll leave the rest to someone else; I'm tired. Feel free to let me know if something is up with my redline.
As per the background, I'll put it bluntly. PLEASE work on perspective! It will save your life, I'm telling you.

UHH I don't know how to vote right now but I may...say something later, I kind of need to mull it over.
And good luck!

Kyuubi-Kitsune @ Tuesday, December 22nd 2009, 6:30 PM

Toast covered a lot and I really don't feel like going over much...
here's something quick about the perspective of this... http://www.iaza.com/work/091223C/khad_delete74302.png
idk if the road is curving or something but it's easier to keep it straight
And Toasteh corrected this in her redline, but I'm gonna say it just in case you don't catch it: the way the torso is turned... it seems like it would be kinda unnatural and uncomfortable to be walking while in that position... maybe it's just me...
aaaannnd the b/g... looks kinda like a dodge/burn overload.. xD uh, so... yeah...
um but I think you're improving! I also don't really know what to vote but I'm thinking third? If you can incorporate more of what the crits that were given said your tryouts lacked in... then hopefully..!

[EDIT] Arrrg y'know I don't think I did the perspective thing right AT ALL hnnngggg so forget it
it shouldn't be completely parallel but kinda turn into the vanishing point... uh yeah... but the perspective on this isn't really extreme so idk. I'M TERRIBLE AT CRITIQUEING

(Edited on December 22, 2009, 8:10 pm)

Anne Dyari @ Friday, December 25th 2009, 12:34 PM

Your anatomy is definately improving, and I like the shading on the fur/skin.
The main things I'm having a hard time with is the strong texture over white of the street and background. When using texture(which I'm bad at too), try using the main color underneath, and when adding texture, change the hue to slightly off, so the texture is more smooth and blends in.
Also, I want dramatic lighting! -bad at that too- Throw in the lighting to match the time of day, strong during the early morning and evening. Lighting will tie the character and the background together.
I want to see a third... you're really close.

issi_007 @ Saturday, December 26th 2009, 1:12 PM

I've been sick all week, so I'm sorry if I sound a little harsh and mean. Ughhh sorry <33

I say third.

Try to stay away from pillow shading. It makes the image flat. Look up a tutorial on shading, as it'll show you a few concepts which I can in no way describe.

I do love how clean this is. However, you need to work on perspective. Even though the sidewalk is curved, it does not change the principles of perspective.

I love the colours you've used, though.

ffff aww those cheeks are adorable. ;o;

okay that's it.
Once again, sorry if I sound harsh. <33

Khadyah @ Saturday, December 26th 2009, 1:38 PM

Okay, third it is, thank you guys for the critiques, hopefully I'll do better on my third ^^

And I see that some of you guys are afraid of being to harsh but seriously, I can take it and I see all the points you guys are getting at so I'll try to work on my perspective A LOT (I kinda suck at it yes)

Now I gotta brain storm at what to draw |D; TIME TO GO TO SLEEP >:D

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Khadyah @ Friday, December 18th 2009, 4:26 PM

All donesies c: Crit away

I realize that my anatomy is probably off quite a bit because I have trouble with using real pictures as references :T I tried to do it a little but still... it probably didn't help that much.

Well anyway enjoy~

(Edited on December 18, 2009, 9:09 pm)

Arf @ Friday, December 18th 2009, 9:27 PM

bawww you beat me at getting your first tryout finished!! D: lol x3

good luck<3!

Khadyah @ Friday, December 18th 2009, 9:38 PM

Yeaaah well Arfie, that's because I, unlike you, don't have any life whatsoever c: I'm an incredibly unhealthy, malnutritioned, lazy, procrastinating, internet addicted young woman with a rash.

:3 And that's the difference between me and you. I finished this in one day solely because I spend to much time on the interwebs.

Thank you ^^

(Edited on December 18, 2009, 9:38 pm)

Kyuubi-Kitsune @ Friday, December 18th 2009, 9:44 PM

Ahaha I agree with what you said to Arf... and I'm the same as you xD lol
Ok, I'm on my Wii right now so um, I'm not gonna crit quite yet... will get to it soon though...

Arf @ Friday, December 18th 2009, 9:47 PM

;__; i miss it when i was like you guys!!
luckily my Christmas break officially begins now that today is over!!

so i can waste my life on the cpu!! i want to finish and stop procrastinating!!

Khadyah @ Friday, December 18th 2009, 9:55 PM

@ Kyuubi-Kitsune: ...I didn't know you had a rash .-.

@ Arf: Yay for life wasting

-highfive-

Kyuubi-Kitsune @ Friday, December 18th 2009, 9:57 PM

Arf, no. Just, no. Getting caught up in cpu world is the worst thing you can do (though I would like you to finish your tryout too).
Arrrg I'm homeschooled and my mom's not giving us Christmas break till Christmas eve T^T luckily I don't have co-op classes, but still... I hate school

@khadyah lol itchy dry skin=perpetual rash

(Edited on December 18, 2009, 9:58 pm)

Khadyah @ Friday, December 18th 2009, 9:59 PM

I'm home schooled too c: I think my mom is giving us a break because my older brother is getting a break in collage but I not 100% sure >3> But weekend is here

Yushness

Kyuubi-Kitsune @ Friday, December 18th 2009, 10:03 PM

Yay home schooled buddies!! -high fives-
My bro's got break from college too, I think... I think he has finals early this week and then he's free C:

Kyuubi-Kitsune @ Friday, December 18th 2009, 11:37 PM

ok I'm on the computer now and can get to the critiques...
please note that I'm tired right now and am probably making zero sense...
Firstly, I love your style of shading/highlighting. The textures look lovely <3
The legs are.. off. The way a cat's leg bends is... Well, cat's stand on their toes, you see. When drawing full body of an animal, it helps for me to picture a person standing on their fingers and toes. here, I drew something crappy up: http://www.iaza.com/work/091219C/later116620.PNG
The same applies with the front legs; they're standing on their fingers: http://www.iaza.com/work/091219C/later233639.PNG
Ok, um, I'm not so confident in my anatomy so I could be wrong... anyway, I'll zoom through some crits...
The shading, although nice, seems to be misplaced in a couple areas. I can't really tell which angle the light source (the sun, I think xD) is coming from... I'm guessing around the top-left of the picture?? if so, it might be more like this? http://www.iaza.com/work/091219C/later390206.PNG
Also, the eyes... kinda bug me.. they're just... black... you couldt've added highlights or color or something? The background is nice, but a liiiiittle flat too...
um it's bedtime now so i g2g
but good luck on you next tryout!

(Edited on December 19, 2009, 8:07 am)

Khadyah @ Saturday, December 19th 2009, 12:03 PM

Okay I understand where you're getting at ^^;

And the thing about the eyes... he doesn't have 'em |D; I thought about adding something but I don't know how to shade a hole >->;

Kyuubi-Kitsune @ Saturday, December 19th 2009, 5:58 PM

xD oh, ok. yeah idk how you'd shade that either.
Btw, you've improved so much from your previous tryouts <3

Toasteh @ Monday, December 21st 2009, 2:40 PM

Definitely an improvement from your past tryouts! However anatomy is still something you need to grasp better. You may want to practice drawing or at least looking at skeletal and muscular structure when you draw. The body itself is a bit thin and (Please don't take this the wrong way) looks a bit like a clay sculpture...? The legs and head look like they were just...stuck on there and as for the tail, it's much too thick at the base. Everyone's heard this many times before, but the tail is an extension of the spine. If it helps, you could try (When you're sketching) defining the spine, and that might help...
WELL OKAY I DON'T WANT TO COVER ANATOMY ANYMORE someone else can jump in.
Now for the background: the perspective is off by quite a bit. Another cliche in a tryout comment--generally things that are farther away look smaller, and things that are closer look larger. What we have here is a case of "Copy+paste syndrome," which...means the subject looks like it was copy and pasted onto a background. If it helps, you might want to try pulling up some pictures of buildings, etc. and try sketching them out. That should help you get a better grip on perspective.

I'll leave anything else to whoever wants to jump in. I didn't cover much, so if anyone wants to go more in depth...?
Good luck!

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chainedfox @ Saturday, December 12th 2009, 11:07 PM

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nsjGlKMcEQk&feature=channel

Kyuubi-Kitsune @ Saturday, December 19th 2009, 6:06 PM

the animation in that music video was absolutely stunning <3

ShiPainter
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chainedfox @ Tuesday, December 8th 2009, 9:35 PM

a digimon im working on

does anyone on here have there own fake digimon or pokeomn?

and does anyone have a spore account?

soulwithin465 @ Wednesday, December 9th 2009, 7:24 AM

Yeah I don't have my own but this is rather lovely~

I like the soft colors >3<

Arf @ Thursday, December 10th 2009, 8:57 AM

i used to have some made up pokemon... but they were poorly made on my part xD idk if i remember their designs...

chainedfox @ Thursday, December 10th 2009, 3:15 PM

thanx

Kyuubi-Kitsune @ Tuesday, December 15th 2009, 5:57 PM

haha I never really got into digimon. I mean, my memories of it are REALLY vague xD
But growing up I used to play with pokemon stuffed animals and this one cute digimon one.. i don't remember it's name but this was it-- http://www.iaza.com/work/091216C/delete65102.PNG

chainedfox @ Wednesday, December 16th 2009, 3:23 PM

oh! i remember that digimon, its gomamon
hes so cute

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Kyuubi-Kitsune @ Tuesday, December 8th 2009, 6:06 PM

[EDIT] ffffffff lol he has one wonderful hairstyle xD
Oh I miiiiggght be getting a tablet!! It's for this contest (don't feel like going into detail about it) and um, not to sound all high on myself but, uh, I've seen the other entries and... haha I'm pretty sure I'll win...
And I also just learned there's a hotkey for the undo button.. >_< would've been helpful 3 years ago lol
---
BLAAAAAAAAAAH
Timer lies..... artblock's no fun :C

(Edited on December 15, 2009, 6:18 pm)

Arf @ Tuesday, December 8th 2009, 6:58 PM

tell me about it! I'm having art blockage trouble too!
I need to get back into my computer life too lol-- real life just gets boring xP i have one class this semester that is sucking away my life!! D: but i enjoy it D:
(BTW, THIS LION IS EPIC SO FAR<333)

soulwithin465 @ Wednesday, December 9th 2009, 7:25 AM

wha this is cute cute cute!! And I love the shading so far~ Those eyes are so pretty!

chainedfox @ Wednesday, December 16th 2009, 3:22 PM

this is awsome, i love ur style
its so cute

ShiPainter

Anne Dyari @ Monday, December 7th 2009, 11:19 PM

~~Started in photoshop, finishing in shipainter.~~

(Uploaded by Anne Dyari)

4/7 done ^^

Kyuubi-Kitsune @ Tuesday, December 8th 2009, 1:03 PM

GLUTTONY
would be me, not you, Anne C:
Hnnnnngggggg i really love those jeans lol xD

Arf @ Tuesday, December 8th 2009, 2:39 PM

do i spy a Monster energy drink there?! C: care to share??

soulwithin465 @ Wednesday, December 9th 2009, 7:30 AM

ahh such nice shading~

And you wouldn't happen to be doing the 7 sins now would you?? >w<

Anne Dyari @ Wednesday, December 9th 2009, 8:31 AM

@arf: of course xP good thing about college, I can use meal swipes for monsters, kekekeke -has massive stash of monsters-
@soulwithin: YUSH!

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