Weazie Oekaki Intermediate

Weazie Oekaki Intermediate
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Moo @ Monday, November 3rd 2008, 9:29 PM

ok, I took the fin out, so I could show you the anatomy. It isn't perfect, because elongated bodies are hard for me XD Someone else probably would have done a better job~

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POODLEPEE @ Wednesday, November 5th 2008, 12:43 AM

Ty.

Khadyah @ Wednesday, November 5th 2008, 6:50 PM

Thanks for the redline C:

Moo @ Saturday, November 8th 2008, 12:45 PM

No problem at all CX

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Khadyah @ Monday, November 3rd 2008, 4:16 PM

I'm actually PROUD of this one! 8D

The clouds and the sky came out a little... messy, but I love the grass and the path. This was my first time using textures to shade and I think it came out kinda successful. Though I think I could have used a finer texture.

I'm seriously going all out on these tryouts. Just like the one before, this is my first time doing this pose, first time doing a background like this, and a first time trying out more detailed anatomy.

Now for downsides...

The sun came out undesirable and frankly Toboggan(the name of this character) doesn't really look like a fox, but just like a dog .3. . I'm not good at drawing differences between wolves, foxes, and dogs. Or any kind of canine D|

POODLEPEE @ Wednesday, November 5th 2008, 12:42 AM

You should be proud.
This came out very nicely.

Sorry for the absence of comments.
WOA isn't very popular yet.

ANYWAYS; crits C:
I do like the pose you have, but te body seems like it goes kinda skinny in the back. Watch your view.
Next, the shading is very simple. I don't see much wrong with it besides the awkward tone-look. When using tones, you need to switch the tone to make it fade into the base color.
Your lines are nice, but they need to be tapered! Come onnnnn tapering is fun C:
Also, the background looks a little rushed.

Overall the picture is adorable.
I would say practice for 6 more weeks though.
I don't think your quite there yet, but with a little practice, you'll surely make it!

Khadyah @ Thursday, November 6th 2008, 4:03 PM

O: ok... :3 Another 6 weeks it is

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Khadyah @ Wednesday, October 22nd 2008, 7:28 PM

I was on WO beginner so I thought I'd try out for intermediate. I'm probably not good enough but... could it hurt? I know I'm a terrible artist soo... crit away! Doesn't hurt me!

This is the first time so I wanted to ask a few questions
1. how many trys do I get?
2. do I have to do all of them or if you can see my art is good enough you'll let me in?
3. What are requirements for my tryout pictures?
4. If someone got in Advanced would they automatically be able to draw on Intermediate?
5. Do you need to have requirements to crit on someone's tryout?

ok that's it. I know the color is leaking a little, but I thought that would be good water affect... Even though the water affects stink.

(Edited on October 22, 2008, 8:25 pm)

Khadyah @ Friday, October 24th 2008, 3:20 PM

.__________. ok since no one seems to crit on it I'll crit my own picture -shot- Mostly only because i saw a lot of things wrong with it

Ok... well the shading is third rate and if there is no light (because I didn't put rays of light) why is his head and muzzle shiny? The head is unrealistically round and the hind legs would be to short to support him. Also the claw is only on the inside of the paw, not the outside (I only found this out after i drew the pic >____> ). The web in his fingers wouldn't help him swim at all, I can barely see them. The clam looks stupid because I have no idea how to draw them and I didn't use a reference. The tail doesn't look like it's going into the background, it just looks plain small. He's under water, his whiskers should be sorta floating to the top as he slowed down. The anatomy looks cartoonish and undetailed (which is really just how I draw but still...). The eye doesn't really have shape and the one on the right looks slanted.

The only thing I like in this picture is the bubbles and the fin -runs off to make tryout #2-

manic-sonic @ Saturday, October 25th 2008, 2:19 PM

yeah i know what it's like ;_____; my first comment was a week after i posted it, but its because this oekaki isnt very active XD

but i really like this, good luck~ <3 and those eyes are epic!

Khadyah @ Saturday, October 25th 2008, 3:27 PM

@ Manic Sonic: oh wow I week ._______. yikes... Well thanks for the complements but I'm pretty sure this stinks ^^; -flee-

manic-sonic @ Saturday, October 25th 2008, 3:41 PM

IT DONT STINK >:|

ITS BAD TO LIE YOU GET ULSERS ON YOUR TOUNGE >:|

POODLEPEE @ Saturday, October 25th 2008, 4:16 PM

This oekaki is very inactive.
I appologize.
It's our newest one.

:C

Khadyah @ Saturday, October 25th 2008, 6:41 PM

@ Manic: DX Nu uh this stink, I seriously don't like this picture...

@ PP: It s'okay C: . I'm gonna try out but take your time if it's gonna take a while to comment. I just noticed a lot of bad stuff myself soo... I got bored ._______.;

Moo @ Sunday, October 26th 2008, 5:35 PM

Yeah, this place isn't very active at all yet. Very sorry for the inconvenience. Would you like me to redline it for you?

Khadyah @ Monday, October 27th 2008, 3:49 PM

@ Moo: yeah I redline would be great, thanks C:

Moo @ Monday, November 3rd 2008, 9:29 PM

Alright, I posted your redline at the top of the page! C:

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manic-sonic @ Tuesday, October 7th 2008, 3:02 PM

my first tryout here, i used to draw on a different oekaki, but things got a bit hard there. i joined this oekaki for my friend, and they said that i should tryout for here, soo i did

i hope you like it!

POODLEPEE @ Monday, October 13th 2008, 10:53 AM

GAH;
thats awesome C:
The intermediate oekaki is not very active yet

Your always welcome to the beginner or advanced anytime C:

CRITSSSS:
The shadin' looks pretty accurate, but it looks like it was rushed or done sloppy. Make sure your shading is crisp (unless style varies) because shadin' makes a pic. Your lineart looks really nice w/ the tapering and stuff, but when u get too close to a line with those water colors (that you used for shading) it blurs the pic and makes it look messy. I really like your background. It's simple & dosent take away from the pic.

I look forward to seeing your next tryout.
Goodluck C:

manic-sonic @ Monday, October 13th 2008, 12:49 PM

omg the first person to comment on this, and its the OWNER ;; im so happy now X3

yeah, who knows why i used watercolours, i NEVER use them. solids are a bazillion times easier.

and thanks

Moo @ Monday, October 13th 2008, 6:15 PM

PP pretty much got all of the crits~
Good luck to you C:

ShaoShao @ Monday, October 27th 2008, 7:41 AM

This has been bugging me for a while now. The shading is VERY off considering where you've put the sun. The sun is your light source, and while its light would bounce off other things and onto the subject, generally that light is only on one side of the subject and leaves the rest in shadow.

I suggest considering that before drawing a sun in next time - a sky scene doesn't necessarily need it to be complete and you avoid a lot of trouble by just saying 'the light source is higher up'. Also, having it in yellow can cause some confusion between realistic and more stylised/cartoony themes - realistically a yellow sun would give out yellow light.

I'd say that's more on advanced level though, a lot of people don't experiment so much with shading until quite far on in their development. It's worth thinking about anyway, the longer you know of something the more time you have to try incorporating it gradually.

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Jumbalaya @ Friday, September 26th 2008, 12:44 AM

i'm pretty sure the timer is lying to you.. don't listen to it's liesssss...

well, s.s.
this shall be my second tryout C:

I cant rly do much.. I'm having friend issues.. :c but i think that's all over.. and i'm quite sure she hates me now. but i'm glad all the fighting is over.

finally getting around to finishing this..
I changed wut it was tho 'cos my last picture was ugly.. now it's way better 'cos I'm referencing from a real photo Cx
i love opossums

(Edited on October 16, 2008, 10:36 pm)

lay-down-low @ Monday, October 20th 2008, 12:23 AM

lol this reminds me of my fav comics, there is Mizz.Possum with her three kids (i forget their names lol)
well, good luck!

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ShaoShao @ Saturday, September 27th 2008, 4:24 PM

There's no saving those back legs, lol.

(Edited on September 28, 2008, 10:18 am)

Cop out background is cop out.

(Edited on September 28, 2008, 10:53 am)

POODLEPEE @ Monday, October 13th 2008, 10:54 AM

Nice shading & interesting design.
It looks so mystic...
:O

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Ichigo @ Wednesday, July 9th 2008, 5:45 PM

watercolor shading

Zest @ Wednesday, July 9th 2008, 7:48 PM

well holy crap .-.
excuse me while i find words to describe this gorgeous piece!

unicorn_horse @ Wednesday, July 9th 2008, 8:12 PM

What Zest said.

plusook @ Wednesday, July 9th 2008, 11:10 PM

what unicorn-horse said.

x3

Tor @ Thursday, July 10th 2008, 9:51 AM

this made me swallow my tongue.

Hoshii @ Thursday, July 10th 2008, 12:43 PM

This is so pretty o3o <3

Laurz @ Thursday, July 10th 2008, 4:17 PM

archive.

unicorn_horse @ Thursday, July 10th 2008, 5:18 PM

Yes, archive.

Zest @ Thursday, July 10th 2008, 11:53 PM

archive archive archive!

Random @ Saturday, July 12th 2008, 11:26 AM

Holy shah. I agree with everyone, archive
I love the background the most. ;; I love the sunset feel, and the trees. And you captured the fur pattern in an amazing way <3

silverdust 123 @ Sunday, July 13th 2008, 1:01 PM

oh my gosh... it's a bobcat...

Moo @ Tuesday, July 15th 2008, 9:17 PM

-archive'd-

My goodness this is beautiful<3

Zest @ Thursday, July 17th 2008, 4:29 PM

whoo, first archive!
you totally deserved it <33

manic-sonic @ Tuesday, October 7th 2008, 3:15 PM

wow, this is beautiful, congrats on the archive, well deserved

<33

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Daisoku @ Friday, September 19th 2008, 5:17 PM

All done! Finally!

Comments and crits,plzu.

And don't ask me why the mountains are like that. This IS pokemon world...
And the Sky DOES have shading. ^^'

(Edited on September 24, 2008, 2:24 pm)

POODLEPEE @ Tuesday, September 23rd 2008, 10:40 AM

Nice shading so far.

...
pleasetellureeveetostopstaring.

Moo @ Friday, September 26th 2008, 10:10 PM

I'm saying out, sorry :CC

Your shading is lovely on the eevee, the stump, and the mountains.Though I don't see why the sky should be shaded the way it is. During the day, the sky is normally the same shade of blue. If there's ever a different shade of blue in the middle of the day, it would either be because the sun is making the blue around it look brighter, or it gets brighter as it gets towards the horizon. Kind of like this:
http://homepage.mac.com/credmond/iblog/C1876264345/E1926659294/Media/RainierFromHiway.jpg
http://www.mindscapesonline.com/catalog/images/24sun_and_sky.jpg
Of course, there's sunrise and sunset, but they normally look like this:
http://www.freefoto.com/images/45/11/45_11_10---Sunrise_web.jpg
http://www.crh.noaa.gov/images/sgf/wxphotos/sunsets/sunset.jpg
Ok, on to anatomy and stuff... A pokemon isn't really the best thing to draw in a tryout, because their anatomy is very stylized. Plus, you made it harder by hiding most of the body with the tail. I'll redline, because I'm no good with critting anatomy.
(or at least I think so gdgs)
http://op.weazie.com/Chill_Pill_Oekaki/pictures/170.png
The back shouldn't arch as much as you drew it, and the legs shouldn't really curled up as much either. (the back legs lol)
the front legs are to stiff looking. Plus, there's no paws. The eyes shoudn't be that big, and the face has no structure to it. the nise should be sticking out more than it is, ans the shading shouldn't do what it's doing on the face.
My advice to you right now, would be to look at pictures of real foxes or dogs (or whatever else yo want to draw) and try to draw it like it is in the picture. if the legs bend a certain way when in a certain position, then try to incorporate that into your drawings C:
Good luck~

ps, sorry if my crits seem harsh vgdfgd I'm no good at them, and I gotta get used to the intermediate board |D

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Murderous @ Wednesday, September 17th 2008, 10:32 AM

lol doodling <3

jeez, this oekaki is like dead :<

people need to draw here more.

Ichigo @ Wednesday, September 17th 2008, 7:43 PM

Cool awesomness. I love its tail and the real dark back legs. And the tone shading is really nice. :3

POODLEPEE @ Tuesday, September 23rd 2008, 10:41 AM

Fabulous style
And I adore this pose.

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Ichigo @ Saturday, September 6th 2008, 5:37 PM

Wow. Totally spam. Delete if needed.

Moo @ Saturday, September 6th 2008, 9:52 PM

I JUST LAUGHED

SO HARD

OH MY GAWD<333
;u;

Summer @ Sunday, September 7th 2008, 7:11 PM

Y'know, they say that under Chuck Norris's beard, there's no chin... just another fist.

I giggled at this. C:

Arf @ Tuesday, September 9th 2008, 3:27 PM

kljsfklsdajgdl

d;slgk
Where did you think this awesome crap up?!!
those expressions are killing me..
oh and thanks for making me LOL in the library... and get stared at... ^^;;

Murderous @ Wednesday, September 17th 2008, 9:24 AM

dkfjsnfdksfn

<3333

lol wow

Tree @ Saturday, September 20th 2008, 4:18 PM

ffffffffdjsghdgk
this > anything

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Sun @ Sunday, September 14th 2008, 7:23 PM

And now I'm done. D:

(Edited on September 14, 2008, 8:35 pm)

Ichigo @ Sunday, September 14th 2008, 10:20 PM

Your pokemanss are so adorable! Its mouth = priceless. The eyes are so pretty! It's amazing how you do them.

Sun @ Sunday, September 14th 2008, 10:25 PM

Awww thanks.

Hoshii @ Monday, September 15th 2008, 1:20 AM

Ugh i love the eyes and the grass <33
AMAZINGGGG 8D;;

Sun @ Monday, September 15th 2008, 1:41 AM

Thanks

Murderous @ Wednesday, September 17th 2008, 9:12 AM

Gahh your skills make me jealous ;.;

I can't find anything to crit on 0.0
seriously.

Oh nevermind |D

Maybe i could crit on some shading.

cause Im just confused with the anatomy, plus its pokemon so its not my strong point.

Well, your simply amazing. But maybe the collar and that elbow fin should have some darker areas from being behind something (head and leg) hm. I think thats it |D I just got up so I can't honestly think at the moment.

anyway still, this is very lovely, the shading is just really neat, i love the legs and posture.

(Edited on September 17, 2008, 9:22 am)

Tree @ Saturday, September 20th 2008, 4:17 PM

oh this is so pretty

i say 'in' in advance ooooh rebel.

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Daisoku @ Wednesday, September 3rd 2008, 3:59 PM

He's...in a wierd fieldy grassy place..?
Tryout 2 - Shizuka ni tada mimamotteiruuuuu

(Edited on September 16, 2008, 3:28 pm)

Arf @ Friday, September 5th 2008, 2:14 PM

finish soon!!~

Voodoo @ Wednesday, September 10th 2008, 5:29 PM

Draw him walking through water, man!
Or in a swamp or something.

But goodluck!

Murderous @ Wednesday, September 17th 2008, 9:29 AM

I'm sorry but I'm going to have to say out.

The background is a bit plain, and the legs look to...'bent'? and he doesn't exactly have a neck, I can redline cause i don't have paint or anything, anyway, he should be a slight bit longer because he needs a ribcage etc.

And i think the shadings alright, but just needs some work.

Look at some dog pictures I guess, look at how they are, there legs, how long they are, try and catch those small helping tips you can find. Like paws, belly, neck, head, muzzle, etc. and do the same with backgrounds, try and find a good perspective within it.

Daisoku @ Wednesday, September 17th 2008, 3:16 PM

Ohwell,I don't mind. I'll just have to wait a while 'till i'm a teen,then I MIGHT gain a little bit of skillz. ^^ Then I MIGHT try again.

Actually,I see what you meen with the legs,though I only see it in the front...

(Edited on September 19, 2008, 3:57 pm)

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POODLEPEE @ Monday, September 1st 2008, 2:34 AM

I'm not gunna finish this.
Cuzzz I don't like it

OHWELLC:

(Edited on September 2, 2008, 1:17 am)

Claps @ Monday, September 1st 2008, 9:53 PM

i like it! how long will it take you to finnish it? o-mail me!!

Arf @ Friday, September 5th 2008, 2:15 PM

well, you should finish CUZ i like it.
that lineart is amazing.
this is so delicious.. srsly. Your art style is so unique^^

Voodoo @ Wednesday, September 10th 2008, 5:30 PM

I love your fursona's colors
SOMUCH

Daw well I hope you get your stuff back D:

Murderous @ Wednesday, September 17th 2008, 9:29 AM

oh man

smooth lines are smoootthh :B

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maniac @ Sunday, September 7th 2008, 9:39 AM

Yeah This was going to be a tryout, but I didn't have the inspiration to finish it so

Can anyone make this image transparent for me?

Plus I couldn't think of a background

(Edited on September 7, 2008, 9:42 am)
Sorry bout that

(Edited on September 7, 2008, 10:02 am)

? Space It ? @ Saturday, September 13th 2008, 11:34 AM

http://www.iaza.com/work/080913C/989780794122-iaza.gif ?-- Transparented. c:

Murderous @ Wednesday, September 17th 2008, 9:24 AM

Aw :< you should finish.

Its very cute.

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Hoshii @ Saturday, September 13th 2008, 5:50 PM

lol hi timer lies and this fails

my tablet is at home
so i had to do this with a laptop touchpad

>:

(Edited on September 13, 2008, 7:56 pm)

Kunaike @ Sunday, September 14th 2008, 4:30 AM

OMG YOU DID THIS WITH A TOUCHPAD?! D:
This is so cute, you amazing person.

Sun @ Sunday, September 14th 2008, 8:45 PM

I love the wetness. D: And the adorable style you posses. <3

Ichigo @ Sunday, September 14th 2008, 10:20 PM

Amazing! Especially with touch padss. Eet is so cute. Poor wet little fella.

Murderous @ Wednesday, September 17th 2008, 9:23 AM

you are amazinnggg

just because you can draw with a touchpad |D

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