Weazie Oekaki Intermediate

Weazie Oekaki Intermediate
	Welcome to Weazie Oekaki's critique & improvement board! Before drawing, please read the rules at this link ^{Updates: AH SURVEY'S CLOSED finally after like. months?? like 4 months. incredible. ((I'll be posting a summary of responses etc soon)) - Toasteh, 08 May 2014}
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tigerchic643 @ Saturday, February 14th 2009, 4:27 PM

to drepressed to finish.

Toasteh @ Saturday, February 14th 2009, 6:51 PM

RAWRG DON'T BE DEPRESSED >:C
-happyrainbow-

Anne Dyari @ Sunday, February 15th 2009, 1:17 AM

awww, you should finish this, I love that tail!

POLYGONS;; @ Sunday, February 15th 2009, 11:01 AM

/spaz
It...it's a gas mask...
This is beautiful!!!
Finish!
<333

Arf @ Friday, February 20th 2009, 12:42 PM

*doan wry b happeh now~~*
<333 I LIKE DIS HERE CREATURE<3 is beautifully unique!

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Bixie-Bee @ Sunday, February 15th 2009, 1:06 PM

GUH!
as done as it gets! my Java was acting up (giving me a Java E when I was uploading the highlighting, but I hope this point is okay enough)
*goes to find a mod to bump it up*
Also ^^; sorry about the time, school started again and well, I was busy

(Edited on February 15, 2009, 12:54 am)

POODLEPEE @ Thursday, January 29th 2009, 12:02 AM

This lookes like its going to be amazing.
Good luck.

Hazuza @ Thursday, January 29th 2009, 2:19 AM

....
*Kicks you to advanced*

(Edited by Toasteh)
I KICK YOUS IN DAH FAEC. >C

Bixie-Bee @ Thursday, January 29th 2009, 11:07 AM

*hides* but I don't wanna go there yet, I like it here :< lol

Toasteh @ Thursday, January 29th 2009, 11:13 AM

Oh lawd we need more people drawing here anyway. -kicks Hazu-

Kunaike @ Thursday, January 29th 2009, 7:42 PM

The lineart is so clean and prettyyy *u*
-kicksself- lol

Hazuza @ Friday, January 30th 2009, 12:18 AM

yuh but then you can draw in both places lawl D8>

... And STOP EDITZING MAH POSTS D8<

(Edited on January 30, 2009, 12:20 am)

(Edited by Toasteh)
Muahahahaha >D
(Edited by Arf)
tee hee eue

Toasteh @ Sunday, February 15th 2009, 1:47 PM

IN.

I don't have time to crit a lot, but all I really have to say is that the bg is a little out of perspective, and the head is just a weeee bit too small. I tend to do that a lot. :C
The legs are also a little off, mainly the hind legs, but it isn't the first thing I jump to. I'd redline if I could, but I can't so sldkfj

BUT THAT SHADING IS BEAUTIFUL, GOD, IF I COULD SHADE LIKE THAT. The only thing I would correct on it is maybe making it look more fluffy on the tail.

But yeah, other than that GET'CHUR MAGNIFICANT BOOTY IN HERE. I'm a bad critter. C:

Anne Dyari @ Sunday, February 15th 2009, 1:49 PM

IN. XP omg, love those paws.

tigerchic643 @ Sunday, February 15th 2009, 3:43 PM

hlkfksdjsald this is so BEAUTIFUL!!!
get ur a** in here!

Hazuza @ Tuesday, February 17th 2009, 1:46 AM

omfg pretty.

Yeah, in. it's luff xD
I especially lovethe background...

A short crit, the main thing that sticks out to me is the anatomy. just a little.. I think mainly the front paws, which look kind of short. You should've continued the line in the front a bit further up o3o; The chest also seems kind of low/big...

Other than that, I just think you could've done some darker shading~ It kind of fits though, since snow creates reflection that makes shading lighter *-* Maybe just on the ground.

I really love that back paw for some reason o3o

Jazzy @ Thursday, February 19th 2009, 6:29 PM

in!
this is lovely, i adore the soft shading and how you drew the fur c:

also the face is really nice

issi_007 @ Friday, February 20th 2009, 6:01 AM

In <3
I love this concept c:
And that background is really awesome 8D

Arf @ Friday, February 20th 2009, 12:40 PM

sounds like you're in~ n_n I think I'm going to start over on my first tryout ^^;;; but congrats to you!~

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Anne Dyari @ Thursday, February 12th 2009, 1:34 AM

been alittle depressed of late, my boyfriend of now... three years joined the marine corps, and doesn't have much time to write, and little to no computor access.
Most of friends have boyfriends/girlfriends, and most are really careful around me, but two couples have been making out at every turn. I feel like I'm being overly sensitive, but it really bugs me.

ah, I just needed to vent I guess ^^;

Bixie-Bee @ Thursday, February 12th 2009, 11:30 AM

*pets* naw, I get the same way, especially around valentine's day... though.. lol, I'm more like.. without boyfriend...
but... if you think of it.. for you, when he gets time to see you or write to you, it'll just seem so wonderful that I'm sure your friends will look at their partners and be like... why can't you do that for me??
But I'm sure he's thinking of you and misses you just as much!

Taz @ Friday, February 20th 2009, 10:24 AM

that definately is not fun :c

i suppose i understand what you are talking about. the same thing happens to me but on a much smaller scale. i never see my boyfriend but my friend and her boyfriend make out whenever they are together. i dont see him because he lives a half hour away...although i do think your situation is much worse. i do hope he returns home and safe and that everything works out for you two.

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? Space It ? @ Thursday, January 29th 2009, 12:34 AM

All done. :3
First tryout --> http://oekaki.weazie.com/intermediate/pictures/128.png

In or out?

IN: 1
BORDER: 2
OUT: 1

(Edited on January 31, 2009, 7:26 pm)

(Edited on February 2, 2009, 6:07 pm)

Anne Dyari @ Thursday, January 29th 2009, 12:38 AM

-BUMPED- ^^

Love the wonderful gradient on the sky and the great grass texture. I would've liked to see stronger shadows on the character itself, but overall really nice ^^
I say In.

EDIT: We need more responses on this tryout guys!

(Edited on February 1, 2009, 10:11 pm)

Toasteh @ Thursday, January 29th 2009, 6:50 PM

ALRIGHTY THEN, CRIT TIME!!

Wellll my human anatomy isn't the bestttt so I'll just point out the obvious.

Well, it's pretty apparent that your style is very anime-ish, however it reminds me more of dolls. The...entire body is out of proportion to the rest of the body. :I
The head and neck sizes bother me the most.
Stylization, I knowwww but anatomy must be studied upon BEFORE stylization.
I know.
I've had problems with it before.
And I'm guessing you're hiding those toesies with the sand? Wellll it doesn't work that way. You should be able to see more of that foot, and maybe just a little of the toes. Right now it looks more like a blanket, less like tiny grains of rock.
The way the subject is sitting makes it look more like she's floating than sitting on the swing...And the expression...leaves much to be desired, but that's just my personal preference, really.

The grass could've had more effort put into it, but I'm no good at grass so lkdfjlfkj

Also, I agree with Anne on the shading depth...and that gradient homg.

Other than that, I say borderline/third tryout maybe?
More study and practice on human anatomy could do you some good, hon. <3

Ichigo @ Saturday, January 31st 2009, 3:10 PM

This one is better than your other one.
I think it needs more dark shadows and could use some anatomy work such as minimizing the headsize, arm length and body size. Just make things a little more proportional. It's interesting what you did with the grass but lineart you put there gets a little confusing. I'm not quite sure what's under her either. Sand? It could be a little clearer.

I like the gradient sky though.

Your other tryout was a bit sloppy and not much was going on and there were similar proportional problems.

I say no. Work on those things a little more and come back. Though I do think the wait period to try out again is a little long. You're really close.

Hazuza @ Sunday, February 1st 2009, 10:57 PM

Your red is eyeburning, anne *-*

Ff.... Yeah, I'm with everyone on the anatomy problems, shading, and quick background, so I won't post my usual long crit

I think I'm borderline, but.... probably only because I dunno what a barely out looks like on here o-o;

Sorry >.<

Oi, there's a wait period? o3o

(Edited by Arf)
I think it's like 6 weeks~ should be in the rules.

issi_007 @ Friday, February 20th 2009, 6:05 AM

I'm saying in, even if your first tryout wasn't even full body.
I really like this background and the shading is really nice <3
c:

Most crits have been covered, so good luck c:

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fusion @ Tuesday, February 10th 2009, 9:02 PM

because it had to happen eventully :
fff sorry for the undertimed ness i have to get off my computer . . . . because I was banned gafsdfslj

(Edited on February 10, 2009, 9:03 pm)

Anne Dyari @ Wednesday, February 11th 2009, 9:51 AM

Good luck! can't wait to see this finished!

Toasteh @ Saturday, February 14th 2009, 10:51 PM

OH YES, FINISH SOON YES??

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tigerchic643 @ Tuesday, February 10th 2009, 5:58 PM

jdshfks just a doodle of my char Reason/
[wip]

Anne Dyari @ Wednesday, February 11th 2009, 9:52 AM

cute pose ^^ -leeeeeeean-

tigerchic643 @ Thursday, February 12th 2009, 6:42 PM

thanx. =]

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Random @ Monday, February 2nd 2009, 8:30 PM

probably re-tryout one?
i haven't drawn/been here in ages... >:

i played with the watercolor and i now realize how much i love it. c:

Anne Dyari @ Monday, February 2nd 2009, 9:29 PM

Nice job ^^ Love the anatomy and movement of this. Beautiful soft highlights!

Good luck on your next tryout!

Toasteh @ Monday, February 2nd 2009, 9:40 PM

Watercolors sure are funnn ~~<3

All I really have to say is those paws look a little small :I

Gl <3!

Hazuza @ Tuesday, February 3rd 2009, 1:16 AM

I like that smudge-like effect~ It makes it look like he's evaporating awayyyy~.... Or something. What were you trying to convey in that? =o

I find this pretty sweet~ Love the shading... The background seems a little plain... I like your sky though. You probably could've put the horizon a little higher and added... idk mountains or something... just to make it look less... flat? lololImbadatfindingwords

I'm with Toast on the paws, they're definitely really small :x especially the back ones. They're a little oddly curved in the back, too... For the front-left one, I think the ankle would bend the other way as it's pushing on the ground. The paws could also be a little broader. While I'm on anatomy... Might just be me, but he seems a little fat

Emphasize on the Might-just-be-me part *-*;;

Your lineart is a little unbalanced also, with thick lines on the eyes and face and nonexistant lines on the torso and tail. It would've been better if you kept it steady all the way through, or at least make the lines on the face lighter.

Sorry if I sound harsh D: I tend to be nitpicky, but they're just suggestions to take into account *0*; The more nitpicky my crits, that just means the better you did ;D xD

Random @ Tuesday, February 3rd 2009, 5:08 PM

thanks so much <3 i see what you mean about the fat and the bendy paws xD i kinda rushed the paws... :x and yeah, evaporating~

darkvine @ Saturday, February 7th 2009, 4:00 PM

X3 love this

wc is fun right?
i dig those smudges a heck of a lot i do

uh im not the best at crits so ill just say that the back legs seem a bit off
idk the one behind seems off the most
idk how to explain the best, probly too round, not quite as like legish with bones
ill stop haha
but i do love this

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Taz @ Sunday, February 1st 2009, 11:34 AM

my submission for Thurop's valentines day contest :]

i figure i need to draw on here more, since im an admin and all. XD so hi to everyone i don't know, im Taz.

ive been a member here at Weazie for almost two years and am normally found at WOA, although i am going to start drawing here more.

Toasteh @ Sunday, February 1st 2009, 4:52 PM

lol I love Flapjack.

Yes, draw herrrre more. >:I
You
You
Hypocrite. >C

jkjk <3

Anne Dyari @ Thursday, February 5th 2009, 9:48 AM

Yum. Candy XP

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Hazuza @ Tuesday, February 3rd 2009, 7:37 PM

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nHvjwoTARKA&feature=related

>: watch eet. ;3;

The message in a bottle is explained in this;
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9kC_usC7bGU&feature=related

Anne Dyari @ Thursday, February 5th 2009, 9:47 AM

-didn't watch video, heading to school in a min-

Love the soft lineart hear, looks like pencil. ^^

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Loveless @ Wednesday, February 4th 2009, 3:52 PM

I need to draw here more D:

Random @ Wednesday, February 4th 2009, 4:11 PM

sdhglk i loooove how you draw mouths/snouts... this is going to turn out so awesome, if you finish.~

Toasteh @ Thursday, February 5th 2009, 1:54 AM

...I love you <3

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tigerchic643 @ Saturday, January 31st 2009, 2:17 PM

finished.
one down one more to go.

(Edited on February 1, 2009, 4:30 pm)

Toasteh @ Saturday, January 31st 2009, 2:26 PM

FINISH SOON PLZU?? -batsdesueyelashes-

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.Psychopath. @ Tuesday, January 27th 2009, 12:06 PM

edit: I'm done!
gahhhh.. this took forever D:
well anyways, crits plz c:

I shall start on my second one tomorrow.

(Edited on January 27, 2009, 11:30 pm)

Arf @ Tuesday, January 27th 2009, 1:59 PM

I don't think tryouts are allowed to be critiqued before they're finished ^^;;

Thudd @ Tuesday, January 27th 2009, 2:10 PM

yeah..... that what i though too...
but it is lovely so far C:

Toasteh @ Tuesday, January 27th 2009, 4:05 PM

Yep, no tryout critiques. :C

Tryout suggestions are probably okay though...
Liiike not telling someone to fix something, more like an idea for a clever background if they didn't know what to do.

Like if I were trying out and I didn't have any ideas for a bg, someone could say "BEING CARRIED AWAY BY FIREFLIES" or some other such nonsense.

Groggy @ Tuesday, January 27th 2009, 5:07 PM

This looks really adorable so far. I love the ears, and the eyes. The over all concept is nice.
This is going to be really nice when its finished. c:

.Psychopath. @ Tuesday, January 27th 2009, 7:29 PM

oh sorry, i didn't know D:
-runs off to finish-

Hazuza @ Thursday, January 29th 2009, 2:18 AM

idk what makes or breaks an archive but sure xD This is awesome~

.Psychopath. @ Thursday, January 29th 2009, 6:17 PM

wow you guys really think so? o.o

(Edited by Toasteh)
YES

.Psychopath. @ Friday, January 30th 2009, 1:24 AM

oh wow.. thank you so much for the archive 8D
<33

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.Psychopath. @ Wednesday, January 28th 2009, 9:10 PM

s.s.
I decided to try a different animal other than a dog. in this case, an elk Cx
and Im also gonna try soft shading it..
anyways, i'll finish this later or w/e.. I'm getting bored of it D:

Anne Dyari @ Thursday, January 29th 2009, 12:44 AM

Looking great so far, can't wait to see this finished!

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tigerchic643 @ Wednesday, January 28th 2009, 7:53 PM

hhaha i guess im a member now.
so spam.
to lazy to shade. XD

Toasteh @ Wednesday, January 28th 2009, 9:44 PM

YAYYYYYY HIYA TIGIE

POODLEPEE @ Thursday, January 29th 2009, 12:03 AM

This picture makes me

ROFL

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darkvine @ Wednesday, January 28th 2009, 9:22 AM

sorry at school, cut short
ugh i cant get the one i started here to send idk why but it wont upload through like anything

SORRY dont ahve a better pic :C to give you guys

just wanted to say that im an admin now and if you guys need anything
just give me an Omail shout out

id really like to do the best i can and help with what i can

Anne Dyari @ Wednesday, January 28th 2009, 9:40 AM

This is looking cool so far! -can't do pixels at all-

And congrats on adminship ^^ -got it too- Yay!

Taz @ Wednesday, January 28th 2009, 11:10 AM

heyyy there, my fellow admins. :] ive been an admin alone here for quite some time XD

eh actually i never draw here. but im gonna start.

darkvine @ Wednesday, January 28th 2009, 5:17 PM

lol i feel really out of place cause i was never here
but but im gonna try
bah i do want to be a good admin lol first time hopefully ill learn well form this

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