Weazie Oekaki Intermediate

Weazie Oekaki Intermediate
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ShaoShao @ Saturday, September 27th 2008, 4:24 PM

There's no saving those back legs, lol.

(Edited on September 28, 2008, 10:18 am)

Cop out background is cop out.

(Edited on September 28, 2008, 10:53 am)

POODLEPEE @ Monday, October 13th 2008, 10:54 AM

Nice shading & interesting design.
It looks so mystic...
:O

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Ichigo @ Wednesday, July 9th 2008, 5:45 PM

watercolor shading

Zest @ Wednesday, July 9th 2008, 7:48 PM

well holy crap .-.
excuse me while i find words to describe this gorgeous piece!

unicorn_horse @ Wednesday, July 9th 2008, 8:12 PM

What Zest said.

plusook @ Wednesday, July 9th 2008, 11:10 PM

what unicorn-horse said.

x3

Tor @ Thursday, July 10th 2008, 9:51 AM

this made me swallow my tongue.

Hoshii @ Thursday, July 10th 2008, 12:43 PM

This is so pretty o3o <3

Laurz @ Thursday, July 10th 2008, 4:17 PM

archive.

unicorn_horse @ Thursday, July 10th 2008, 5:18 PM

Yes, archive.

Zest @ Thursday, July 10th 2008, 11:53 PM

archive archive archive!

Random @ Saturday, July 12th 2008, 11:26 AM

Holy shah. I agree with everyone, archive
I love the background the most. ;; I love the sunset feel, and the trees. And you captured the fur pattern in an amazing way <3

silverdust 123 @ Sunday, July 13th 2008, 1:01 PM

oh my gosh... it's a bobcat...

Moo @ Tuesday, July 15th 2008, 9:17 PM

-archive'd-

My goodness this is beautiful<3

Zest @ Thursday, July 17th 2008, 4:29 PM

whoo, first archive!
you totally deserved it <33

manic-sonic @ Tuesday, October 7th 2008, 3:15 PM

wow, this is beautiful, congrats on the archive, well deserved

<33

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Daisoku @ Friday, September 19th 2008, 5:17 PM

All done! Finally!

Comments and crits,plzu.

And don't ask me why the mountains are like that. This IS pokemon world...
And the Sky DOES have shading. ^^'

(Edited on September 24, 2008, 2:24 pm)

POODLEPEE @ Tuesday, September 23rd 2008, 10:40 AM

Nice shading so far.

...
pleasetellureeveetostopstaring.

Moo @ Friday, September 26th 2008, 10:10 PM

I'm saying out, sorry :CC

Your shading is lovely on the eevee, the stump, and the mountains.Though I don't see why the sky should be shaded the way it is. During the day, the sky is normally the same shade of blue. If there's ever a different shade of blue in the middle of the day, it would either be because the sun is making the blue around it look brighter, or it gets brighter as it gets towards the horizon. Kind of like this:
http://homepage.mac.com/credmond/iblog/C1876264345/E1926659294/Media/RainierFromHiway.jpg
http://www.mindscapesonline.com/catalog/images/24sun_and_sky.jpg
Of course, there's sunrise and sunset, but they normally look like this:
http://www.freefoto.com/images/45/11/45_11_10---Sunrise_web.jpg
http://www.crh.noaa.gov/images/sgf/wxphotos/sunsets/sunset.jpg
Ok, on to anatomy and stuff... A pokemon isn't really the best thing to draw in a tryout, because their anatomy is very stylized. Plus, you made it harder by hiding most of the body with the tail. I'll redline, because I'm no good with critting anatomy.
(or at least I think so gdgs)
http://op.weazie.com/Chill_Pill_Oekaki/pictures/170.png
The back shouldn't arch as much as you drew it, and the legs shouldn't really curled up as much either. (the back legs lol)
the front legs are to stiff looking. Plus, there's no paws. The eyes shoudn't be that big, and the face has no structure to it. the nise should be sticking out more than it is, ans the shading shouldn't do what it's doing on the face.
My advice to you right now, would be to look at pictures of real foxes or dogs (or whatever else yo want to draw) and try to draw it like it is in the picture. if the legs bend a certain way when in a certain position, then try to incorporate that into your drawings C:
Good luck~

ps, sorry if my crits seem harsh vgdfgd I'm no good at them, and I gotta get used to the intermediate board |D

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Murderous @ Wednesday, September 17th 2008, 10:32 AM

lol doodling <3

jeez, this oekaki is like dead :<

people need to draw here more.

Ichigo @ Wednesday, September 17th 2008, 7:43 PM

Cool awesomness. I love its tail and the real dark back legs. And the tone shading is really nice. :3

POODLEPEE @ Tuesday, September 23rd 2008, 10:41 AM

Fabulous style
And I adore this pose.

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Ichigo @ Saturday, September 6th 2008, 5:37 PM

Wow. Totally spam. Delete if needed.

Moo @ Saturday, September 6th 2008, 9:52 PM

I JUST LAUGHED

SO HARD

OH MY GAWD<333
;u;

Summer @ Sunday, September 7th 2008, 7:11 PM

Y'know, they say that under Chuck Norris's beard, there's no chin... just another fist.

I giggled at this. C:

Arf @ Tuesday, September 9th 2008, 3:27 PM

kljsfklsdajgdl

d;slgk
Where did you think this awesome crap up?!!
those expressions are killing me..
oh and thanks for making me LOL in the library... and get stared at... ^^;;

Murderous @ Wednesday, September 17th 2008, 9:24 AM

dkfjsnfdksfn

<3333

lol wow

Tree @ Saturday, September 20th 2008, 4:18 PM

ffffffffdjsghdgk
this > anything

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Sun @ Sunday, September 14th 2008, 7:23 PM

And now I'm done. D:

(Edited on September 14, 2008, 8:35 pm)

Ichigo @ Sunday, September 14th 2008, 10:20 PM

Your pokemanss are so adorable! Its mouth = priceless. The eyes are so pretty! It's amazing how you do them.

Sun @ Sunday, September 14th 2008, 10:25 PM

Awww thanks.

Hoshii @ Monday, September 15th 2008, 1:20 AM

Ugh i love the eyes and the grass <33
AMAZINGGGG 8D;;

Sun @ Monday, September 15th 2008, 1:41 AM

Thanks

Murderous @ Wednesday, September 17th 2008, 9:12 AM

Gahh your skills make me jealous ;.;

I can't find anything to crit on 0.0
seriously.

Oh nevermind |D

Maybe i could crit on some shading.

cause Im just confused with the anatomy, plus its pokemon so its not my strong point.

Well, your simply amazing. But maybe the collar and that elbow fin should have some darker areas from being behind something (head and leg) hm. I think thats it |D I just got up so I can't honestly think at the moment.

anyway still, this is very lovely, the shading is just really neat, i love the legs and posture.

(Edited on September 17, 2008, 9:22 am)

Tree @ Saturday, September 20th 2008, 4:17 PM

oh this is so pretty

i say 'in' in advance ooooh rebel.

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Daisoku @ Wednesday, September 3rd 2008, 3:59 PM

He's...in a wierd fieldy grassy place..?
Tryout 2 - Shizuka ni tada mimamotteiruuuuu

(Edited on September 16, 2008, 3:28 pm)

Arf @ Friday, September 5th 2008, 2:14 PM

finish soon!!~

Voodoo @ Wednesday, September 10th 2008, 5:29 PM

Draw him walking through water, man!
Or in a swamp or something.

But goodluck!

Murderous @ Wednesday, September 17th 2008, 9:29 AM

I'm sorry but I'm going to have to say out.

The background is a bit plain, and the legs look to...'bent'? and he doesn't exactly have a neck, I can redline cause i don't have paint or anything, anyway, he should be a slight bit longer because he needs a ribcage etc.

And i think the shadings alright, but just needs some work.

Look at some dog pictures I guess, look at how they are, there legs, how long they are, try and catch those small helping tips you can find. Like paws, belly, neck, head, muzzle, etc. and do the same with backgrounds, try and find a good perspective within it.

Daisoku @ Wednesday, September 17th 2008, 3:16 PM

Ohwell,I don't mind. I'll just have to wait a while 'till i'm a teen,then I MIGHT gain a little bit of skillz. ^^ Then I MIGHT try again.

Actually,I see what you meen with the legs,though I only see it in the front...

(Edited on September 19, 2008, 3:57 pm)

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POODLEPEE @ Monday, September 1st 2008, 2:34 AM

I'm not gunna finish this.
Cuzzz I don't like it

OHWELLC:

(Edited on September 2, 2008, 1:17 am)

Claps @ Monday, September 1st 2008, 9:53 PM

i like it! how long will it take you to finnish it? o-mail me!!

Arf @ Friday, September 5th 2008, 2:15 PM

well, you should finish CUZ i like it.
that lineart is amazing.
this is so delicious.. srsly. Your art style is so unique^^

Voodoo @ Wednesday, September 10th 2008, 5:30 PM

I love your fursona's colors
SOMUCH

Daw well I hope you get your stuff back D:

Murderous @ Wednesday, September 17th 2008, 9:29 AM

oh man

smooth lines are smoootthh :B

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maniac @ Sunday, September 7th 2008, 9:39 AM

Yeah This was going to be a tryout, but I didn't have the inspiration to finish it so

Can anyone make this image transparent for me?

Plus I couldn't think of a background

(Edited on September 7, 2008, 9:42 am)
Sorry bout that

(Edited on September 7, 2008, 10:02 am)

? Space It ? @ Saturday, September 13th 2008, 11:34 AM

http://www.iaza.com/work/080913C/989780794122-iaza.gif ?-- Transparented. c:

Murderous @ Wednesday, September 17th 2008, 9:24 AM

Aw :< you should finish.

Its very cute.

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sov @ Friday, August 29th 2008, 8:23 PM

Safety save of tryout two C:

would this still count as a tryout if i didnt put the rest of her body on this?

plusook @ Saturday, August 30th 2008, 12:06 AM

hmm... I think you're allowed to submit something like this instead of a fullbody w/ a background, and just let the votes change as they may or may not- but I'm not positive, so I would ask an admin first. :>

This looks great, btw!

Voodoo @ Saturday, August 30th 2008, 9:26 AM

This is fantastic, darling. Yeah you have to do a full body but since you already did in your first tryout and this is at least half of one we'll let it slide this time. Maybe try adding the abdomen/upper half of legs? Finish soon, whateva you dooo 8D

Arf @ Thursday, September 11th 2008, 9:16 PM

,msdhnd FINISH<3
it's amazzing so far! I love the hands~

Mara @ Thursday, September 11th 2008, 10:04 PM

Ah this is really pretty
it makes me think of a picture I saw in a tutorial somewhere but I can't remember where

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Joce @ Friday, August 29th 2008, 7:32 PM

hahah wooo idk what im doing

Ichigo @ Friday, August 29th 2008, 10:08 PM

TT_TT such awesome facesss.

Voodoo @ Saturday, August 30th 2008, 9:26 AM

JO JO JO JOCE
Yey desu rainbow

Arf @ Thursday, September 11th 2008, 9:17 PM

PURDY COLORS
and your sketches are lovely~

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Robot @ Wednesday, August 27th 2008, 4:33 PM

Ok.

Finally finished. :F

In or out? ;-;

(Edited on August 27, 2008, 7:43 pm)

Ichigo @ Wednesday, August 27th 2008, 5:18 PM

So not ugly! I love his fins. Especially his tail fin.

Ichigo @ Wednesday, August 27th 2008, 7:17 PM

Pssh you are so already in. I'm not sure if your done but maybe you should add more bg stuff like bubbles or something.
--
*spaz*
Win.

(Edited on August 27, 2008, 10:08 pm)

Tor @ Thursday, August 28th 2008, 4:47 PM

IN.
i love your lineart, shading, and style.

Arf @ Thursday, August 28th 2008, 9:37 PM

I'm still a member on the advanced-- so I'll go ahead and say in
You have awesomesauce shading and did nicely with the fins.
my only complaint is the bg. but from your first tryout I know you have good bg potential.

Voodoo @ Friday, August 29th 2008, 5:00 PM

If you're already a member of advanced you don't need to try out for intermediate, but oh well. This is very cute; has a lot of personality. I'd suggest adding "ripply sun lines" (lol I fail) where the sun is shining through the water to give it a more aquatic feell. Also the bubbles look just like spheres; if you made them transparent they'd be more tangible.

For anatomy, the muzzle seems a bit awkwardly curved, and the webbing on the paws...it appears to be attached to the nails instead of the toes, is this how it's supposed to be? Also, the shadow by the eye makes the illusion that it's floating by its head so shading more around the cheekbone area would make it look more natural.

But you're in and, bravo!

plusook @ Friday, August 29th 2008, 10:49 PM

In, great shading job.

The inking is clean and smooth, the anatomy is good, and the poses are nice, too.

My only crit is the eye; It looks a bit bulgy to me (which may be intentional), but if you -weren't- going for that effect, shade above it and highlight below it instead of visa-versa.

Chelly @ Friday, August 29th 2008, 11:14 PM

http://i88.photobucket.com/albums/k195/chellyreffs/redlineyayy.jpg

redline for youuu! 8D;
the coloring is really pretty wow iwi

in

(Edited on August 29, 2008, 11:15 pm)

Moo @ Friday, August 29th 2008, 11:55 PM

I say in as well.

I'm not particularly positive about this oekaki's skill level yet, but I can tell you're within that range C:

Voodoo seems to have gotten all the crits. All I can really say is add a little definition to the brow. Congrats on getting in C:

Robot @ Saturday, August 30th 2008, 4:11 PM

tyty so much for crits and redline guys. :3
(Yes webbing is supposed to be connected to the claws)
Ahaha. Thank you.. now I see what is wrong with the eye. xDD

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Daisoku @ Wednesday, August 27th 2008, 3:26 PM

^^'
Tryout number 1.

I know my atonomy isn't the best,or my backgrounds...And you're all gonna probably say no...but I wanna try anyway.
Hehe...She's flying...Slowly.Very slowly.

Robot @ Wednesday, August 27th 2008, 3:38 PM

I'm not accepted yet, but I think this is awesome.
In your next tryout maybe try using textures in the background and stuff. You don't have too, of course, but I'm just trying to give you dumb little tips to try and help. xD; /fail
Good luck.

Jazzy @ Wednesday, August 27th 2008, 6:40 PM

this is so pretty c:
since i'm accepted on woa.. i guess i am on here too, so would you like a redline?

Daisoku @ Thursday, August 28th 2008, 8:18 AM

Oohredlineplzu

Voodoo @ Friday, August 29th 2008, 5:14 PM

Hello, welcome to WOI C: I'm Voodoo, an admin at WOA.

It appears that you've used a more stylized approach, making it more chibi-ish, but the most important thing to remember in this style bones and joints sitll have to look natural. Here, the legs seem to bend like elastic annd that is not the case in vertebrate animals such as this canine. The head appears a bit large, and there doesn't seem to be a neck to support it, as it just rests on the shoulders.

Dog's eyes are focused more on the front of the head, and you dred the eye somewhat too far to the side. From the angle they look like kind of a "pizza slice" if the shape is simplified.

Here, I made you a redline, I hope it helps c:

http://i325.photobucket.com/albums/k400/chiefrabbit/dairl.png

As for coloring I see a few color leaks aroudn the edge. But good luck!

Moo @ Saturday, August 30th 2008, 12:00 AM

Voodoo got all of the crits I can think of. Good luck though~

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sov @ Thursday, August 28th 2008, 9:37 PM

Sorry, this isnt my best TuT~~

but it will have to do <3

sov @ Thursday, August 28th 2008, 9:39 PM

ps this didnt take close to that long. i had to go get my hair cut, styled and highlighted. and get some bubble tea yumm.

Voodoo @ Friday, August 29th 2008, 4:54 PM

This is great, love it, love it.
I can't crit on the anatomy because I suck at peopleeee...All I can say is the arms are a bit short, especially that rigt one. Overall love the composition of this, it's a very delightful piece. There's not much shading but I think that it makes the picture look good how it is. I say in c:

Char @ Friday, August 29th 2008, 5:09 PM

Ooh, I liek this! (: The little monster thingies around her are so adorable! <3 pinwheel, aweee.

Crittage. Okay. I'm cool with human anatomy. Really, everything is great on the girl... Except the hands and arms. The arms are much too short, and the hands are very small! D:

I don't know if the small hands are part of your "style", but judging from the rest of the body style, I don't think so. So... make 'em bigger! :>

As for the arms... As a helpful tip for future human drawings, the elbow will rest at the top of the hips, and the hands will rest around mid-thigh. I can redline if you'd like. :]

Also, shadiiing. I can see you did some, but it's very light, and hard to see. Maybe try some darker shades? And some lighting? :> Also, The background would have shading too!

All in all, a great tryout pic! (: I'm sure you get into WOI no problem! <3

(Edited on August 29, 2008, 5:09 pm)

sov @ Friday, August 29th 2008, 5:29 PM

EWWWW now that i look at it it looks like... demented. ew. ew. i have to fix that. ew.

haha jk im not gonna fix it. wheeee.

(Edited on August 29, 2008, 5:54 pm)

Char @ Friday, August 29th 2008, 5:59 PM

I'm not sure if you're allowed to go back and fix stuff after we've critted anyways :B

GL!

plusook @ Friday, August 29th 2008, 10:47 PM

Aww, this is super-cute and a great tryout.

I'll agree that the hands and arms are a bit small, though; as for other crits- the clothing folds look a little random. But, clothes are a tough thing to do, and it doesn't detract from the image.

I'll be lookin' forward to tryout #2~

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plusook @ Sunday, August 17th 2008, 6:10 PM

"I'll come back
when you call me...
no need to say goodbye..."

This board needs more drawing!
I am going to draw here for while.

Ichigo @ Monday, August 18th 2008, 12:00 PM

Very nice. But I think it'd be beter if there weren't yellow tones in his skin, at least not all overr. I really love the face and stuff.

Voodoo @ Friday, August 29th 2008, 4:55 PM

AS AM I, SIFU HOT-MAN

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