Weazie Oekaki Intermediate

Weazie Oekaki Intermediate
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Anne Dyari @ Thursday, February 12th 2009, 1:34 AM

been alittle depressed of late, my boyfriend of now... three years joined the marine corps, and doesn't have much time to write, and little to no computor access.
Most of friends have boyfriends/girlfriends, and most are really careful around me, but two couples have been making out at every turn. I feel like I'm being overly sensitive, but it really bugs me.

ah, I just needed to vent I guess ^^;

Bixie-Bee @ Thursday, February 12th 2009, 11:30 AM

*pets* naw, I get the same way, especially around valentine's day... though.. lol, I'm more like.. without boyfriend...
but... if you think of it.. for you, when he gets time to see you or write to you, it'll just seem so wonderful that I'm sure your friends will look at their partners and be like... why can't you do that for me??
But I'm sure he's thinking of you and misses you just as much!

Taz @ Friday, February 20th 2009, 10:24 AM

that definately is not fun :c

i suppose i understand what you are talking about. the same thing happens to me but on a much smaller scale. i never see my boyfriend but my friend and her boyfriend make out whenever they are together. i dont see him because he lives a half hour away...although i do think your situation is much worse. i do hope he returns home and safe and that everything works out for you two.

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? Space It ? @ Thursday, January 29th 2009, 12:34 AM

All done. :3
First tryout --> http://oekaki.weazie.com/intermediate/pictures/128.png

In or out?

IN: 1
BORDER: 2
OUT: 1

(Edited on January 31, 2009, 7:26 pm)

(Edited on February 2, 2009, 6:07 pm)

Anne Dyari @ Thursday, January 29th 2009, 12:38 AM

-BUMPED- ^^

Love the wonderful gradient on the sky and the great grass texture. I would've liked to see stronger shadows on the character itself, but overall really nice ^^
I say In.

EDIT: We need more responses on this tryout guys!

(Edited on February 1, 2009, 10:11 pm)

Toasteh @ Thursday, January 29th 2009, 6:50 PM

ALRIGHTY THEN, CRIT TIME!!

Wellll my human anatomy isn't the bestttt so I'll just point out the obvious.

Well, it's pretty apparent that your style is very anime-ish, however it reminds me more of dolls. The...entire body is out of proportion to the rest of the body. :I
The head and neck sizes bother me the most.
Stylization, I knowwww but anatomy must be studied upon BEFORE stylization.
I know.
I've had problems with it before.
And I'm guessing you're hiding those toesies with the sand? Wellll it doesn't work that way. You should be able to see more of that foot, and maybe just a little of the toes. Right now it looks more like a blanket, less like tiny grains of rock.
The way the subject is sitting makes it look more like she's floating than sitting on the swing...And the expression...leaves much to be desired, but that's just my personal preference, really.

The grass could've had more effort put into it, but I'm no good at grass so lkdfjlfkj

Also, I agree with Anne on the shading depth...and that gradient homg.

Other than that, I say borderline/third tryout maybe?
More study and practice on human anatomy could do you some good, hon. <3

Ichigo @ Saturday, January 31st 2009, 3:10 PM

This one is better than your other one.
I think it needs more dark shadows and could use some anatomy work such as minimizing the headsize, arm length and body size. Just make things a little more proportional. It's interesting what you did with the grass but lineart you put there gets a little confusing. I'm not quite sure what's under her either. Sand? It could be a little clearer.

I like the gradient sky though.

Your other tryout was a bit sloppy and not much was going on and there were similar proportional problems.

I say no. Work on those things a little more and come back. Though I do think the wait period to try out again is a little long. You're really close.

Hazuza @ Sunday, February 1st 2009, 10:57 PM

Your red is eyeburning, anne *-*

Ff.... Yeah, I'm with everyone on the anatomy problems, shading, and quick background, so I won't post my usual long crit

I think I'm borderline, but.... probably only because I dunno what a barely out looks like on here o-o;

Sorry >.<

Oi, there's a wait period? o3o

(Edited by Arf)
I think it's like 6 weeks~ should be in the rules.

issi_007 @ Friday, February 20th 2009, 6:05 AM

I'm saying in, even if your first tryout wasn't even full body.
I really like this background and the shading is really nice <3
c:

Most crits have been covered, so good luck c:

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fusion @ Tuesday, February 10th 2009, 9:02 PM

because it had to happen eventully :
fff sorry for the undertimed ness i have to get off my computer . . . . because I was banned gafsdfslj

(Edited on February 10, 2009, 9:03 pm)

Anne Dyari @ Wednesday, February 11th 2009, 9:51 AM

Good luck! can't wait to see this finished!

Toasteh @ Saturday, February 14th 2009, 10:51 PM

OH YES, FINISH SOON YES??

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Random @ Monday, February 2nd 2009, 8:30 PM

probably re-tryout one?
i haven't drawn/been here in ages... >:

i played with the watercolor and i now realize how much i love it. c:

Anne Dyari @ Monday, February 2nd 2009, 9:29 PM

Nice job ^^ Love the anatomy and movement of this. Beautiful soft highlights!

Good luck on your next tryout!

Toasteh @ Monday, February 2nd 2009, 9:40 PM

Watercolors sure are funnn ~~<3

All I really have to say is those paws look a little small :I

Gl <3!

Hazuza @ Tuesday, February 3rd 2009, 1:16 AM

I like that smudge-like effect~ It makes it look like he's evaporating awayyyy~.... Or something. What were you trying to convey in that? =o

I find this pretty sweet~ Love the shading... The background seems a little plain... I like your sky though. You probably could've put the horizon a little higher and added... idk mountains or something... just to make it look less... flat? lololImbadatfindingwords

I'm with Toast on the paws, they're definitely really small :x especially the back ones. They're a little oddly curved in the back, too... For the front-left one, I think the ankle would bend the other way as it's pushing on the ground. The paws could also be a little broader. While I'm on anatomy... Might just be me, but he seems a little fat

Emphasize on the Might-just-be-me part *-*;;

Your lineart is a little unbalanced also, with thick lines on the eyes and face and nonexistant lines on the torso and tail. It would've been better if you kept it steady all the way through, or at least make the lines on the face lighter.

Sorry if I sound harsh D: I tend to be nitpicky, but they're just suggestions to take into account *0*; The more nitpicky my crits, that just means the better you did ;D xD

Random @ Tuesday, February 3rd 2009, 5:08 PM

thanks so much <3 i see what you mean about the fat and the bendy paws xD i kinda rushed the paws... :x and yeah, evaporating~

darkvine @ Saturday, February 7th 2009, 4:00 PM

X3 love this

wc is fun right?
i dig those smudges a heck of a lot i do

uh im not the best at crits so ill just say that the back legs seem a bit off
idk the one behind seems off the most
idk how to explain the best, probly too round, not quite as like legish with bones
ill stop haha
but i do love this

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Taz @ Sunday, February 1st 2009, 11:34 AM

my submission for Thurop's valentines day contest :]

i figure i need to draw on here more, since im an admin and all. XD so hi to everyone i don't know, im Taz.

ive been a member here at Weazie for almost two years and am normally found at WOA, although i am going to start drawing here more.

Toasteh @ Sunday, February 1st 2009, 4:52 PM

lol I love Flapjack.

Yes, draw herrrre more. >:I
You
You
Hypocrite. >C

jkjk <3

Anne Dyari @ Thursday, February 5th 2009, 9:48 AM

Yum. Candy XP

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Hazuza @ Tuesday, February 3rd 2009, 7:37 PM

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nHvjwoTARKA&feature=related

>: watch eet. ;3;

The message in a bottle is explained in this;
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9kC_usC7bGU&feature=related

Anne Dyari @ Thursday, February 5th 2009, 9:47 AM

-didn't watch video, heading to school in a min-

Love the soft lineart hear, looks like pencil. ^^

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Loveless @ Wednesday, February 4th 2009, 3:52 PM

I need to draw here more D:

Random @ Wednesday, February 4th 2009, 4:11 PM

sdhglk i loooove how you draw mouths/snouts... this is going to turn out so awesome, if you finish.~

Toasteh @ Thursday, February 5th 2009, 1:54 AM

...I love you <3

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.Psychopath. @ Tuesday, January 27th 2009, 12:06 PM

edit: I'm done!
gahhhh.. this took forever D:
well anyways, crits plz c:

I shall start on my second one tomorrow.

(Edited on January 27, 2009, 11:30 pm)

Arf @ Tuesday, January 27th 2009, 1:59 PM

I don't think tryouts are allowed to be critiqued before they're finished ^^;;

Thudd @ Tuesday, January 27th 2009, 2:10 PM

yeah..... that what i though too...
but it is lovely so far C:

Toasteh @ Tuesday, January 27th 2009, 4:05 PM

Yep, no tryout critiques. :C

Tryout suggestions are probably okay though...
Liiike not telling someone to fix something, more like an idea for a clever background if they didn't know what to do.

Like if I were trying out and I didn't have any ideas for a bg, someone could say "BEING CARRIED AWAY BY FIREFLIES" or some other such nonsense.

Groggy @ Tuesday, January 27th 2009, 5:07 PM

This looks really adorable so far. I love the ears, and the eyes. The over all concept is nice.
This is going to be really nice when its finished. c:

.Psychopath. @ Tuesday, January 27th 2009, 7:29 PM

oh sorry, i didn't know D:
-runs off to finish-

Hazuza @ Thursday, January 29th 2009, 2:18 AM

idk what makes or breaks an archive but sure xD This is awesome~

.Psychopath. @ Thursday, January 29th 2009, 6:17 PM

wow you guys really think so? o.o

(Edited by Toasteh)
YES

.Psychopath. @ Friday, January 30th 2009, 1:24 AM

oh wow.. thank you so much for the archive 8D
<33

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.Psychopath. @ Wednesday, January 28th 2009, 9:10 PM

s.s.
I decided to try a different animal other than a dog. in this case, an elk Cx
and Im also gonna try soft shading it..
anyways, i'll finish this later or w/e.. I'm getting bored of it D:

Anne Dyari @ Thursday, January 29th 2009, 12:44 AM

Looking great so far, can't wait to see this finished!

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Thudd @ Tuesday, January 27th 2009, 2:08 PM

It's not that bad so far C:
well...
S.S please
because I have to dry my hair before I leave for my socials exam

Groggy @ Tuesday, January 27th 2009, 4:58 PM

No, it's absolutely not bad, so far. It looks really good actually.

I look forward to seeing this complete. C:

Good luck with your tryouts.

Anne Dyari @ Tuesday, January 27th 2009, 9:36 PM

Looks nice so far! Good luck!

Thudd @ Wednesday, January 28th 2009, 2:10 PM

you know what... it won't let me load this again.
i restarted my browser. my internet, and my computer but nothing is showing up. Can I restart my tryout please?

(Edited by Toasteh)
I don't think anyone would have any problems with that. :>
I did that sooo many times when I was retryingout for the advanced...although I wasn't having any shi problems. |D

Thudd @ Wednesday, January 28th 2009, 3:54 PM

thanks toasteh <3

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Anne Dyari @ Saturday, January 17th 2009, 12:05 AM

Sparkley Ket wants YOU to be active on WOI.

Thudd @ Saturday, January 17th 2009, 12:33 AM

i might try out.
but I don't think i could make it in...

Anne Dyari @ Saturday, January 17th 2009, 12:35 AM

Doesn't hurt to try XD

Thudd @ Saturday, January 17th 2009, 1:59 AM

yeah your right C:

Upendi @ Saturday, January 17th 2009, 5:16 AM

jfgjkgfkj It's adorableee~~~<3
Those eyes are so lovely and shading is beautiful too =3..I want that shirt C:

Toasteh @ Saturday, January 17th 2009, 11:51 AM

I need to tryout here. :I

Daisoku @ Saturday, January 17th 2009, 12:22 PM

:3 I would, though I can't really do my 2nd tryout as I have absutely no ins/outs/borderline on my 1st.

Loveless @ Saturday, January 17th 2009, 12:23 PM

I will try D:

love them eyes.

Anne Dyari @ Saturday, January 17th 2009, 1:47 PM

You need ins/outs/borderlines on your first tryout? I thought it was just your second?

Voodoo @ Saturday, January 17th 2009, 2:42 PM

MISSINGNO BACKGROUND OMFG

Yeahhhh I SHOULD draw here
and me and the other admins should get rid of the remainding troll comments -braces self-

Hazuza @ Saturday, January 17th 2009, 11:18 PM

I'm pretty sure you can draw both regardless of the comments you get on the first o3o

fusion @ Sunday, January 18th 2009, 2:19 PM

that shirt is so killer lol
I would try out, but I would never make it

Daisoku @ Sunday, January 18th 2009, 3:02 PM

It's kinda a re-tryout...

But it's re-tryout 1.

I can't think of anything to draw for re-tryout 2 anyway. x.x

(Edited on January 18, 2009, 3:03 pm)

Toasteh @ Monday, January 19th 2009, 3:52 PM

Welll when you retryout you really need to draw BOTH.
The only time you get ins/outs/borderlines on an odd numbered tryout here is if you're requested to do a third tryout.
You know
for further analysis.

Hazuza @ Saturday, January 24th 2009, 1:57 AM

.... I wonder what an 'almost in' looks like for this board?

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Kinomi @ Wednesday, January 21st 2009, 3:51 PM

Done. Its a numbat! Comments and crits plz.

(Edited on January 22, 2009, 12:16 pm)

Toasteh @ Wednesday, January 21st 2009, 6:27 PM

Something to say--FINISH SOON

Edit: OH IT'S DONE YAY
I can't crit though...-cry-

(Edited on January 22, 2009, 9:02 pm)

Kazzers @ Thursday, January 22nd 2009, 8:59 PM

Hey great work! Good luck on getting in! Love how you did the face

Anne Dyari @ Friday, January 23rd 2009, 12:01 AM

Oh, very nice job, one crit though is to try and not let the colors bleed, I see abit of blue and orange that got into the character from the BG.
Other than that, great job ^^

(Edited on January 23, 2009, 12:02 am)

Hazuza @ Saturday, January 24th 2009, 1:45 AM

EDIT; Zong I talk too much.
Not quite sure how to crit the anatomy, since it's pretty good and I have no clue what a numbat is :>;

But I have some things on the coloring. It seems kind of rushed and really sketchy, which in some cases is fine, but like... on the main body it looks kind of weird :c (<-- my way to describe anything lol) It also doesn't seem to have that definite of a light source, with shadows on all sides in certail areas (mainly the head) and no to little shading on the back stripes.

The background's... really messy. But a lot of people have trouble with backgrounds, so you get points for the effort xP
I think next time you could look up some refs for the background, since it looks new to you, and you could take more time on it. The background is a part of the image too, so you should put just as much effort into it as you did the subject

My main tips on the background... Well, more texture, and more shadows. The way you shaded the sand makes it look water-like because of where highlights are, but you should remember that the sun hits nearly every part. Spread out the shading more next time~ And continue the highlights all the way through. You could try making the subject's layer invisible and working on the background alone to keep you focused. I don't get why there's a dark outline around the subject in the BG either *-*; Shading on the mountains (WHICH ARE REALLY ANNOYING TO MAKE ><) and the tree+rock would of been nice, too.

The sky you got half down. The blue fades from light to dark as it gets higher~ You should try putting more detail in clouds if you put them. Clouds even have shadows if you look at them

Though... I dun think there are clouds often in a desert setting...

I still like your subject and your lines, but as you're here, try to improve on your coloring. Look up references if you need to, and be patient! Little things like coloring out of the lines or missing spots can make a big difference in the result.

Good luck on your second tryout, too

(Edited on January 24, 2009, 1:46 am)

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Bixie-Bee @ Thursday, January 22nd 2009, 12:24 AM

supposed to be yawning... but... I hate the big yawn mouth that animals get when they yawn.. but this is my fennic (sp? lol, I just refer to him by his name), Tiru.
He has little bat wings too.
<_< I need a definite paw critique, I used to be able to draw them... but.. well, after not drawing them for a couple years, I lost it.

Hazuza @ Thursday, January 22nd 2009, 1:11 AM

In. In plz.

Crits: Well, they're only nitpicky things. Like how you do ear-tufts; they're kinda... big xD It looks a little awkward. The yawn looks a little weird too... I think the jaw should be stretched a little more, and the tongue kept all the way in.
idk how to crit your paws D8 They're cool already~ Uhm... Maybe the front ones, in this sort of pose, I think pawpads would be fully on the ground, but idk ouo The fur on the back leg that shows it's separate from the body probably wouldn't have to go up so high in the front. I dunno about paws in general, but I think someone here had a good tutorial for them.
I love your coloring :3 The... er... the spotty effect? (idk what to call it D8) Is really fun and looks nice xD I think it would be cool if you cleaned it up a little though. <strike>Archive worthy maybe? D8 But I dunno what archive worthy is anymore Dx</strike> around the tail, particularly.

SORRY IF I SOUND MEAN WHEN I PICK THINGS APART LIKE THAT >.< This is still incredible >:

Where are all you awesome people coming from all the sudden xDD

Ichigo @ Thursday, January 22nd 2009, 7:58 PM

This is so cute! I really like it. The lines are nice and even though it has a very large back leg it's furry and I LOVE it. The background it a little sloppy but I get the idea where it is.

In.

Toasteh @ Thursday, January 22nd 2009, 8:34 PM

IN WUT?
DON'T YOU NEED TWO TRYOUTS?? D:

Kazzers @ Thursday, January 22nd 2009, 8:58 PM

lol you guys are confuzzling me xD

I'm not accepted here yet (because I keep procrastinating from finishing my 2nd tryout) but good luck! This looks awesome!

Hazuza @ Thursday, January 22nd 2009, 10:42 PM

... Lol well yeah, but I doubt their second one will come out terrible enough to get them turned away xD

*shruug*

Anne Dyari @ Friday, January 23rd 2009, 12:03 AM

Very cute! Love the soft shading, can't wait to see your second tryout!

fusion @ Friday, January 23rd 2009, 4:18 PM

this is just amazing <3

Bixie-Bee @ Friday, January 23rd 2009, 8:52 PM

^^, lol, backgrounds were never mah strong points, but thank you all for the crits and complements... looking at that hind leg though, it is pretty high, lol, ^^;; I was so worried about making it a good effort that I didn't know where the lil'bumpkin's knee should have gone..

shoulda pulled out some anatomy books but I was in a groove. I'll try at a better background for the next one, I'm slowly realizing that a background is really another few layers in the picture lol... but... I'm so lazy.
but, I'll definitely work out my next one more.. I hope it'll come out nicer ^^;
<_< also... I kinda sorta.. hunted Mad out.. Mad's new too, I used to watch her stuff on an oekaki she used to be on. lol, it took some effort, but I found mad!

Hazuza @ Saturday, January 24th 2009, 12:17 AM

Ah, that's cool xD

I hope you two stay here a while :> You're both great artists ^^

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Mad @ Tuesday, January 20th 2009, 2:28 AM

aha stuffed toys? my fursona's stuffed? -lame-
I hate this picture it took way to long and looks crap ;_;
originally she was going to be falling but I couldn't get the background right so I made it so she had completed her fall and well, gone splat. c:
(og yes and please feel free to crit anatomy since I. Can't. Do. It.)
(Edited on January 20, 2009, 2:32 am)

(Edited on January 20, 2009, 2:53 am)

Hazuza @ Tuesday, January 20th 2009, 3:06 AM

You should be trying out for advanced >:

Both of your tryouts were amazing! Since your style is kinda sketchy, I dunno really how to crit it ^^;

On this one, I'd just say that the chest around its arm looks a little off, and its right hind leg looks attached funny, but I can't redline or anything because I suck worse *0*;

On your first tryout, the paws looked a bit flat, but you can pull it off imo ^^ The mid-set of paws look a little closer together than the other sets because of the shading and the left one is a bit forward... I think you coulda shaded a bit better on the tail

Still, you draw awesome... ly.... Nice concepts, nice sketchiness, and I adore how you color~
I say in. Innnnnnn. *^*

Mad @ Tuesday, January 20th 2009, 3:08 AM

thankyou so much and I shall certianly take those crits into account.c:

Advanced you say? whoa I've only been doing oekaki for like a month I don't think i'm good enough for advanced x.x

Toasteh @ Tuesday, January 20th 2009, 5:37 PM

WIN

Anne Dyari @ Tuesday, January 20th 2009, 6:10 PM

IN.

And yes, you should try for advanced. (still, if you could help draw here that'd be epic sweet)

Mad @ Wednesday, January 21st 2009, 2:44 AM

well you guys inspired me, I did go and tryout for advanced if you want to see xD

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Mad @ Monday, January 19th 2009, 9:48 PM

purple no?

Hazuza @ Monday, January 19th 2009, 10:10 PM

I love. That fur. O_O
ffffff and that tail.

Can't wait to see your next tryout ><

Toasteh @ Monday, January 19th 2009, 10:26 PM

VERY PURPLE <3

Edit: lol it matches the layout.

(Edited on January 20, 2009, 10:57 am)

Anne Dyari @ Tuesday, January 20th 2009, 6:09 PM

Oooh, wonderful texture of the fur, loving this!

Can't wait to see your next tryout!

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