Weazie Oekaki Intermediate

Weazie Oekaki Intermediate
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? Space It ? @ Saturday, July 24th 2010, 7:42 PM

xD Figured I'd try out again over here~ Since it's been a while and I'm pretty sure I've improved by a ton.

Safety save since I need to get up and do something else. xDDDD

Seidal @ Saturday, July 24th 2010, 7:51 PM

Good luuuccckkk!!! XDDD
'Tori no Shi' nice... 頑張れ～！

(Edited on July 24, 2010, 8:44 pm)

Oh then that would be 歌

Tho "Bird's Poem" is cool too hehe

(Edited on July 24, 2010, 9:21 pm)

? Space It ? @ Saturday, July 24th 2010, 8:52 PM

xD
It's supposed to be 'Tori no Uta' (Bird's Song), so I guess I must've copied something wrong~
Oh well. Wouldn't be the first time. xDDDD;

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? Space It ? @ Monday, June 8th 2009, 3:10 PM

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? Space It ? @ Thursday, January 29th 2009, 12:34 AM

All done. :3
First tryout --> http://oekaki.weazie.com/intermediate/pictures/128.png

In or out?

IN: 1
BORDER: 2
OUT: 1

(Edited on January 31, 2009, 7:26 pm)

(Edited on February 2, 2009, 6:07 pm)

Anne Dyari @ Thursday, January 29th 2009, 12:38 AM

-BUMPED- ^^

Love the wonderful gradient on the sky and the great grass texture. I would've liked to see stronger shadows on the character itself, but overall really nice ^^
I say In.

EDIT: We need more responses on this tryout guys!

(Edited on February 1, 2009, 10:11 pm)

Toasteh @ Thursday, January 29th 2009, 6:50 PM

ALRIGHTY THEN, CRIT TIME!!

Wellll my human anatomy isn't the bestttt so I'll just point out the obvious.

Well, it's pretty apparent that your style is very anime-ish, however it reminds me more of dolls. The...entire body is out of proportion to the rest of the body. :I
The head and neck sizes bother me the most.
Stylization, I knowwww but anatomy must be studied upon BEFORE stylization.
I know.
I've had problems with it before.
And I'm guessing you're hiding those toesies with the sand? Wellll it doesn't work that way. You should be able to see more of that foot, and maybe just a little of the toes. Right now it looks more like a blanket, less like tiny grains of rock.
The way the subject is sitting makes it look more like she's floating than sitting on the swing...And the expression...leaves much to be desired, but that's just my personal preference, really.

The grass could've had more effort put into it, but I'm no good at grass so lkdfjlfkj

Also, I agree with Anne on the shading depth...and that gradient homg.

Other than that, I say borderline/third tryout maybe?
More study and practice on human anatomy could do you some good, hon. <3

Ichigo @ Saturday, January 31st 2009, 3:10 PM

This one is better than your other one.
I think it needs more dark shadows and could use some anatomy work such as minimizing the headsize, arm length and body size. Just make things a little more proportional. It's interesting what you did with the grass but lineart you put there gets a little confusing. I'm not quite sure what's under her either. Sand? It could be a little clearer.

I like the gradient sky though.

Your other tryout was a bit sloppy and not much was going on and there were similar proportional problems.

I say no. Work on those things a little more and come back. Though I do think the wait period to try out again is a little long. You're really close.

Hazuza @ Sunday, February 1st 2009, 10:57 PM

Your red is eyeburning, anne *-*

Ff.... Yeah, I'm with everyone on the anatomy problems, shading, and quick background, so I won't post my usual long crit

I think I'm borderline, but.... probably only because I dunno what a barely out looks like on here o-o;

Sorry >.<

Oi, there's a wait period? o3o

(Edited by Arf)
I think it's like 6 weeks~ should be in the rules.

issi_007 @ Friday, February 20th 2009, 6:05 AM

I'm saying in, even if your first tryout wasn't even full body.
I really like this background and the shading is really nice <3
c:

Most crits have been covered, so good luck c:

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? Space It ? @ Saturday, December 20th 2008, 1:30 AM

Finished. :3

Aw, poor Sillie-chan has to be away from her boyfriend. D:
She misses him.

Timer lies by only a few minutes.

(Edited on December 21, 2008, 11:27 am)

issi_007 @ Sunday, December 28th 2008, 2:05 PM

Giz, there doesn't say anywhere that tryouts have to be a specific size.
And as far as I can see, this is full body.

Good luck c:
<3

Groggy @ Monday, December 29th 2008, 1:35 PM

Giz, do you not know how to critique politely, or do you just like being horribly rude?

Goodluck on your other tryouts. I'm not accepted here, so I don't think I'm allowed to critique or anything. :c But good luck!

(Edited by Arf)
advanced members are automatically able to draw on teh intermediate board/and critique tryouts.

Kyogre @ Monday, December 29th 2008, 4:30 PM

I'm so jealous of everyone's human skills

I'm not accepted so I can't crit though, but good luck!
And Groggy, if you're accepted at WOA I think you should be accepted at WOI too...

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? Space It ? @ Friday, September 19th 2008, 7:11 PM

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