Weazie Oekaki Intermediate

Weazie Oekaki Intermediate
	Welcome to Weazie Oekaki's critique & improvement board! Before drawing, please read the rules at this link ^{Updates: AH SURVEY'S CLOSED finally after like. months?? like 4 months. incredible. ((I'll be posting a summary of responses etc soon)) - Toasteh, 08 May 2014}
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suzu @ Saturday, January 29th 2011, 7:43 PM

flygon~c;

oops forgot to color in the glasses

(Edited on January 29, 2011, 7:43 pm)

Ichigo @ Sunday, January 30th 2011, 12:57 PM

I love flygon!

Nobody @ Sunday, January 30th 2011, 7:23 PM

I like how often you use yellow in your color schemes; it's a really under-appreciated color, but it's my favorite. It's nice to see it put to use in a good way!

suzu @ Sunday, January 30th 2011, 10:03 PM

yes! yellow is such a bright and happy color~
i love how it can set the mood in almost any picture c;

thanks ;u;

Tree @ Thursday, February 3rd 2011, 5:17 PM

i can't get enough of your art it's gorgeous

burnze @ Saturday, February 12th 2011, 5:25 AM

i like your color choices.

Seidal @ Tuesday, March 15th 2011, 1:25 AM

...I love glasses XD

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suzu @ Tuesday, March 1st 2011, 10:15 PM

shhhaayyminnnn

(Edited on March 1, 2011, 10:15 pm)

Seidal @ Tuesday, March 15th 2011, 1:23 AM

homg awesome background XD
and those cheeks!!! @w@

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suzu @ Tuesday, February 22nd 2011, 11:58 PM

somehow the lineart decided to be super cool and smooth
but it's not doing that anymore ;__;

oh i forgot lil'eyelashes and it won't let me re-touch, too bad

(Edited on February 22, 2011, 11:59 pm)

(Edited on February 24, 2011, 9:55 pm)

burnze @ Wednesday, February 23rd 2011, 10:33 AM

i like how you draw people. keep doin you

Seidal @ Tuesday, March 15th 2011, 1:19 AM

dawww a star highlight for the hair! XD

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Anne Dyari @ Saturday, February 12th 2011, 12:24 PM

Sorry about not being active x.x
Sophmore year is kicking my arse. Too many papers.

SOOOO. I will try to at least actively STALK! ^^

suzu @ Saturday, February 12th 2011, 8:10 PM

please do i love your art ;____;
and oh my gosh this only took 13 min? you are a god

(Edited on February 12, 2011, 8:36 pm)

Seidal @ Tuesday, March 15th 2011, 1:18 AM

Good luck Anne~! <3
Haha.. I need to get back into stalker mode actually LOL XD

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Nobody @ Saturday, January 15th 2011, 12:54 AM

Tryoutttt yes indeed

(Edited on January 10, 2011, 7:14 pm)

burnze @ Tuesday, January 11th 2011, 9:26 PM

omfg i love this dood. you musta spent alot of time on the fur!

suzu @ Friday, January 14th 2011, 8:16 PM

I LOVE THAT FUR.
and the lineart is amazing <3
i love the perspective you used <3
in for sure~

Anne Dyari @ Saturday, January 15th 2011, 12:54 AM

Bumped ^^

xlGrimBecky @ Saturday, January 15th 2011, 5:14 PM

How can I not say in.
You put detail in the fur, your anatomy is great, and you always make the expressions amazing <:'I

Anne Dyari @ Saturday, January 15th 2011, 5:39 PM

I also say in, anyone who can use solids like that is WIN.

Khadyah @ Saturday, January 15th 2011, 7:58 PM

I commented on this piece on dA, so you pretty much know how I feel about this picture eue So I'm just going to sit down and say that you better get your butt IN.

Nobody @ Sunday, January 16th 2011, 12:16 PM

oh! thank you, thank you!
and thank you for bumping, anne!

Tree @ Monday, January 17th 2011, 11:59 AM

ugh i can't get enough of your art it is too cool
in, obviously!

Seidal @ Wednesday, January 19th 2011, 7:40 PM

IN OBVIOUSLY i mean WHAT
That fur texturing is insanity

tigerchic643 @ Saturday, February 26th 2011, 6:40 PM

*points toward advanced board*

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suzu @ Saturday, January 29th 2011, 2:50 AM

c: new ID

Anne Dyari @ Saturday, February 12th 2011, 12:26 PM

So cute ^^
Your style is just adorable xP I love those cheeks.

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suzu @ Wednesday, January 26th 2011, 10:10 PM

tablets back ;U;

(Edited on January 26, 2011, 10:10 pm)

Ichigo @ Thursday, January 27th 2011, 9:57 PM

Cutie legssss

burnze @ Monday, January 31st 2011, 7:04 PM

i like this one alot

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suzu @ Thursday, January 27th 2011, 11:01 PM

swanna c:

(Edited on January 27, 2011, 11:01 pm)

Tree @ Friday, January 28th 2011, 4:56 PM

i love the use of yellow and white here!!

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Khadyah @ Wednesday, January 12th 2011, 8:44 PM

Contest prize for a friend on deviantArt

Eeheee this bro was fun to draw :3 Quite a challenge taking the style he was originally drawn it, which was kind of a minimalist kind of style.

But I had a lot of fun and I haven't done anything on oekaki for a while it felt good doing it once again :3

Anyway I hope you enjoy it, and I would love some critiques because I tried some new things in the picture like candle light shading and using more than one light source :3

(Edited on January 15, 2011, 5:11 pm)

Nobody @ Saturday, January 15th 2011, 11:54 PM

would the other light source be, like, the sun?
and are they in a forest, or just a treehouse of some sort?

Khadyah @ Sunday, January 16th 2011, 3:07 PM

Yeah the other source would be the sun, coming from the left :0 And it's sort of both, the house is in a tree but it's a tree in a forest. So like behind the house there's foliage but in front there's like a clearing.

Tree @ Monday, January 17th 2011, 12:00 PM

haha, this is cool. i like the mask thing.

Nobody @ Tuesday, January 18th 2011, 2:40 PM

okay, well, at first I was gonna do a shading redline, but sai won't open up for me atm, so I hope some good ol' fashion word critique will do

For the shading: the candle wouldn't really do anything in broad daylight, actually - especially for a flame without any white (meaning it's weak). Here's a picture of someone holding a lighter when it's not dark: http://www.zurmat.com/wp-content/uploads/2010/10/USB_flash_drive_light.jpg
Notice how even when the flame is that close to the hand, there is no illumination, just because the stronger light source around it basically overpowers it. I would also pronounce the other shadows in the picture more, since they're just teetering around the lines. The shadow that really SHOULD be more is the one under his helmet thing, 'cause that's directly blocking the sun. You could add some fur texture, too; it doesn't need to be heavy, but just where the shading starts, to make it feel a little more tangible.
I would also suggest experimenting with shading color a little, because the colors you use atm are either just darker, blacker versions of the base color, or something close. I think a bright brownish-tan/lively forest green mix would have made a nice color scheme (color scheme can be very important to a picture).

As for anatomy: the legs are a little confusing. His eyes also seem too far apart, but I don't know what his original design looks like, so I can't really redline anything. The way you drew him, he isn't really interacting with the plane of the background at all, so it looks like he's literally on the edge of that wooden panel and is about to fall off. I don't think a digitigrade animal really could sit that way on a ledge.
His hands are off, too; it seems more like they're linking together, rather than holding a candle. Here's a reference that you could use for the hands: http://image.shutterstock.com/display_pic_with_logo/91282/91282,1229581743,1/stock-photo-photo-of-sad-angel-holding-burning-candle-while-standing-under-snowfall-22191481.jpg (sorry; you have to manually copy and paste it)
The neck and the head shape kind of don't work well, either; the neck is barely there, but the head is very pronounced; usually you can only work with that kind of head shape with more neck.

I guess I should also suggest (as I do with anyone that the advice could apply to) that you could experiment with composition in the future. A square canvas can be just right for some things, but for other things, rectangular canvases make it more interesting to look at. Just a couple compositions I can think of for this one are a perspective from the back of the dark treehouse room, so you see him staring at the sky and all of the bright colors of daytime are pronounced against the darkness of the room; or a tall canvas where you can see the entire treehouse, and the trees of the forest peaking over, to give the setting a real sense of depth.

Anyway, I hope that wasn't more than what you were hoping for; I have this proclivity to give out very long-winded (and I suppose some of the younger ones also find it a little too harsh for their palate, because I usually don't throw in compliments to water it down) critique, but I hope it's worth something to you.

(Edited on January 18, 2011, 2:42 pm)

Seidal @ Wednesday, January 19th 2011, 7:46 PM

Oh wow, your lines have certainly gotten cleaner Khad <3 Try not to be overwhelmed.. this looks like quite a project, so just take it in bite-sized pieces at a time :3

Nobody, I really like the critique and advice you laid out. I'm going to try and incorporate those into my next 'kakis

Khadyah @ Wednesday, January 19th 2011, 10:07 PM

@Nobody: Thanks a lot for the advice, I'm pretty sure I understand what you were trying to get at on most of your points c: I'll try to use the tips for my pics in the future, thanks again.

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Anne Dyari @ Monday, November 15th 2010, 5:50 PM

Sorry that I haven't been on... at all lately x.x
Been REALLY busy with college, but I'm planning on signing on once a day, to check on stuff and comment.

If you need me, I WILL be active, so if you send me a message I WILL get to it within a day!

.... my tablet is at home, so yay, touchpad artz. xP

suzu @ Wednesday, November 17th 2010, 2:41 PM

oh wow oh gosh this is just to adorable :>

Seidal @ Thursday, December 9th 2010, 8:59 PM

hey.. no sweat, I'm going through the same thing... hopefully I'll be able to spam these boards after I graduate in a week! XD

Tree @ Monday, January 17th 2011, 12:02 PM

such a cute expression!

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Ichigo @ Saturday, November 13th 2010, 9:47 PM

lol shut up I tried

xlGrimBecky @ Sunday, November 14th 2010, 2:27 PM

....
/in awe

Majestic Cardboard Box @ Sunday, November 14th 2010, 3:10 PM

This looks amazing!

Anne Dyari @ Monday, November 15th 2010, 5:25 PM

Very nice, and very paint-like feel!

suzu @ Wednesday, November 17th 2010, 2:41 PM

never stop realism
ever

Seidal @ Thursday, December 9th 2010, 8:58 PM

aww what a sweet moment

Tree @ Monday, January 17th 2011, 12:02 PM

ichigo your art is lovely this is lovely never stop drawing please.

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Ichigo @ Monday, November 15th 2010, 11:26 PM

-_-; another file on oekaki that was too big.

Here you go!

(Uploaded by Ichigo)

Anne Dyari @ Tuesday, November 16th 2010, 10:10 AM

Nice, jeez, it takes alot of work to oversize a file xD How long did this take?

Ichigo @ Tuesday, November 16th 2010, 10:34 AM

Haha thanks. It maybe took...2-3 hours.

Anne Dyari @ Tuesday, November 16th 2010, 11:19 AM

xD How much time do you have on your hands?!

Ichigo @ Tuesday, November 16th 2010, 4:28 PM

When it comes to drawing I'm an excellent multi-tasker haha

Nobody @ Tuesday, November 16th 2010, 5:25 PM

2-3 hours is really nothing...

I love the lighting in the sky man gosh the colors look so nice together!!

Ichigo @ Tuesday, November 16th 2010, 5:34 PM

You're right. Longest piece if i did continuously would be like around 10 hours. I'm usually too lazy though to do a picture for a long long time.

Anne Dyari @ Thursday, November 18th 2010, 8:52 PM

xP I wish I had you're guys' patience, if I'm not done within an hour or two, I generally just scrap it and work with something else.... -smacks self-

xlGrimBecky @ Wednesday, November 24th 2010, 11:40 PM

Ahhh so beautiful ;____________;

Seidal @ Thursday, December 9th 2010, 9:00 PM

omg... oversized oekaki images become inevitable for me too lol. but homg this is amazing that fur!!!!!!!!

Tree @ Monday, January 17th 2011, 12:01 PM

ah this is gorgeous! i love the eyes.

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suzu @ Thursday, December 9th 2010, 9:10 PM

ahhh im sorry you guys my laptop crashed! ;n;
there wont be any art from me until i can fix it up and get my tablet back on it!
so sorry lovey dears ;; <3

(oh wow! sorry for huge upload)

(Edited on December 9, 2010, 9:12 pm)

Anne Dyari @ Saturday, December 11th 2010, 12:06 AM

Ah... that's no good! Hope you get it back up and running soon, we need this place active x.x

Seidal @ Saturday, December 11th 2010, 6:20 PM

ooh I love her kind of rag-doll look <33
Yikes! I hope things get fixed up soon!!!

Ichigo @ Monday, December 13th 2010, 10:04 AM

Ugh I can't see the picture while commenting but one the board I just ADORED the face. Just...ah! Love it. I like that it's all black and white. I think it's great that way.

Keep it coming!

suzu @ Monday, December 13th 2010, 5:04 PM

hmm yeah i differnent picture comes up when i go to comment too
thank you you guys c:

Tree @ Monday, January 17th 2011, 12:01 PM

this is too cute!

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Majestic Cardboard Box @ Sunday, December 19th 2010, 9:55 PM

Remake of an this ---> http://fc02.deviantart.net/fs45/f/2009/156/8/e/8e7dcc532ac5b172c6ec5e099852e725.png

Timer liessss i was watching a funny Trololol remake

(Edited on December 19, 2010, 9:58 pm)

Seidal @ Friday, December 31st 2010, 2:20 AM

homg I love how you colored his clothing
WOWWWW

Tree @ Monday, January 17th 2011, 12:00 PM

ahh i really love how you did the t-shirt

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Seidal @ Friday, December 31st 2010, 2:44 AM

Finally~~~
This is a request from a while back for xlGrimBecky...
and it's finally done! ...with wacky style changes in between? O___o;
I'm sorry for taking so long!!!!! T____T

(Edited on January 2, 2011, 12:36 am)

Anne Dyari @ Sunday, January 2nd 2011, 11:26 AM

You are really improving!
This looks amazing. @.@
-droooool-
Ack, details on the face, and the hair... I always love how you do hair........

xlGrimBecky @ Sunday, January 2nd 2011, 2:19 PM

OH MY GOD YOU FINISHED IT AHH ;____;
It looks so sexy <33 asjkda you got him perfect augh aifhisdf ;u; Thank you so much <333

Seidal @ Tuesday, January 4th 2011, 1:27 PM

haha good good. I was kind of worried about his facial expression actually.. but I'm glad you approve <33

suzu @ Tuesday, January 4th 2011, 8:52 PM

:q: s- so amazing

Seidal @ Thursday, January 6th 2011, 10:44 PM

y'all are too nice T___T

burnze @ Tuesday, January 11th 2011, 9:25 PM

yeah the hair on this is pretty sick. nice lips too!

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