Weazie Oekaki Intermediate

Weazie Oekaki Intermediate
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xlGrimBecky @ Friday, October 8th 2010, 9:53 PM

I don't really know where I went with this.
Sorry if it looks simple u__u;

Seidal @ Saturday, October 9th 2010, 11:29 AM

things don't need to make sense to look cool XD
I really like how it looks like she's getting unraveled :3

suzu @ Saturday, October 9th 2010, 3:39 PM

nooooo no no no i loove the left arm

Khadyah @ Saturday, October 9th 2010, 5:19 PM

Ahhh come on this is cool c: I love the concept

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xlGrimBecky @ Monday, August 30th 2010, 12:51 AM

Alllll finished.
The thing says for an intro, so uh
I'm Becky from the beginner oekaki.
I usually draw animu and my deviantart is choask1699 good day.

(Edited on August 30, 2010, 2:10 pm)

Anne Dyari @ Monday, August 30th 2010, 2:21 AM

Good luck!

Anne Dyari @ Monday, August 30th 2010, 3:10 PM

I say in, watching your animation, I can see the layering you put into the background, and I really like the sky with the clouds stretched across it.

Anatomy is okay, if I had more time, I would've liked to redline for you, but, overall, IN. ^^

Kyuubi-Kitsune @ Tuesday, August 31st 2010, 8:49 PM

This just seems pretty messy to me. I feel like some more detail/texture in the cave would've been nice? Like you can see all the brush strokes quite easily? OTL I fail at explaining myself.. but like the "painterly" thing can be kinda cool but I just think you should've ~*refined*~ it a little bit... aannnd the water's kind of messy too? like there's a line in the middle and it.. almost looks like you softened some bits but not all? It just sort of looks unfinished in that aspect. It's a nice concept, I just wish you had spent more time on it.
But Anne's right, you have a nice technique watching the animation. :>

Your gallery's not too bad for intermediate so I'm borderline/in ^^;;

(Edited on August 31, 2010, 8:50 pm)

Khadyah @ Saturday, September 4th 2010, 10:18 PM

Hmm... all in all, the character looks well done and the coloring is nice.

My main attention for critique would be on the background. The shading on the cave looks pretty nice, not much to say about there. But the water and sky I think you could have done better on...

Since the sky is a nice bright color, I think the water could have a little more shine to it. I mean if you've ever looked at a lake or the sea and a nice bright day, you would know how much light the water can reflect. Get's pretty shiny.

It would have also been a little nice to see some gradient to the sky because well... skies have gradients. EDIT: never mind the sky looks fine.

And next time I would suggest putting the sky and water on the same layer. It's a tiny bit much more work, but I think the results are worth the hassle.

And I see a coupla color leaks here and there but they're not a big deal.

But all in all I think you know enough about anatomy and coloring to be considered intermediate so I would say INNNN~

(Edited on September 5, 2010, 9:21 pm)

Star @ Sunday, September 5th 2010, 1:07 PM

yeeah i think this is suitable for intermediate oekaki so i say in! :>

Seidal @ Tuesday, September 21st 2010, 5:56 PM

I'll agree with Kyuubi on the messiness... but I can understand how frustrating water, especially the ocean can be. To add more depth in future backgrounds, I'd try implementing atmospheric perspective - fading out things that are further away. I'm sure you'll be improving with every oekaki you do so you're more than welcome~ IN!

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